. . Yeah, You Kno What I'm Saying. . It's One Of This You Gotta Do, You Gotta Progress, Ya Kno, You Gotta Change Ya Style Up A Bit. . Not To Appease Mother Fuckers Tho. . Just To Satisfy Yourself N Give Yourself The Gratification Of Doin Somethin New. .

They Told Me To Elevate, So I Looked For Wings
Only Upliftment I Found Was The Joy These Words Bring
I Can't Sing, But Still Cater A Skill Not Often Scene
I Have No Honey So The Bee's Leave, That's When I Started To Be-Lieve
That I Had Captured A Pattern Of Efficiency
Rhymes Did The Deed, I Established The Dopest Frequency
That's When They Started To Envy Me, I Saw The Jealousy
Like It's A Felony For Me To Do What I Need. .
. . Is That What You Tellin Me ?. .
I've Made It Too Far, To Be Approached By Road Blocks
Just When I Think I'm On The Right Path The Fuckin Road Stops
There's A Fork In It, N Shit I'm Fucking Givin
A Hundred And Ten Percent So I Can Keep Living
So You Can Keep Tryna Tackle, Baffle, N Adle Me
Cause This Shit Is My Respirator, The Only Thing I Need To Breath
This Is My Swan Song, Look Fucks, I Found My Wings. .

{Chorus}
Introducing. . . Formula, The Soon To Be Legendary
So Many Buried, I'm Building A Rap Cemetary
Said I Couldn't Do It, And Now You've Come To Find Through Time
That Mine Isn't A Mime N My God I Have The Mind N Lines. . .
. . . . . . . To MAKE IT. . . . . . . . .

Rhymes Have Gained Eloquence, I Remain Heaven Sent
I Surpassed A Sixth N Made Hip Hop My Seventh Sense
I've Pounded My Revelance. . .
. . . Through The Eyes Who's Ears Have Not Developed
Stinging With My Teachings As The Pen Starts To Swell Up
I'm Doubted More Than Proposed Theories. . .
. . . N I Would Spit The Sun. . .
But The Rain Falling Still Holds Um From Seeing Clearly
See, I'ma Smoker, So I Reach My Thresh Hold Quicker
Had To Adjust My Breath Control. . .
To Allow More Air To Reach Rhymes N Make My Point Bigger
Often Satanic Scriptures, Stenciled My Name Even In Hell
Because With My Mentality. . . Well. .
God'll Reject Me At The Gates For Shit I Said For My CD To Sell
N That's Not Me Leaning To The Commercialisms
That's Saying With My Views. . Formula'll Bust Out The Womb. .
N Make Money Off Of Wisdom In More Than Incriments Soon. .

{Chorus}

Me On Stage Symbolizes A Mic With Greatness Behind It
And I Know Most Would Search N Seek. .
But The Fact Is, Shit, I Ain't Really Tryna Hide It
So Look No Further, I've Made It, N You Hate It
My Fault That My Rhymes Assist Your Defeat Like That Kidd Named Jason
And I Know You Other MC's Hope To Be The Topic Of My Conversation
. . . Yeah I'm Popular. . .
But Sorry Guys This Ain't The Make-A-Wish-Foundation !
I've Had To Push Aside The Tide Of Lies That Try N Tarnish Me
Cause Everybody Gets Made When You Make It. .
But I've Continued Grow, With My Words Like Water N Career Like Harvest Seeds
N I've Made With Hits, With Even More Coming. . .
Trust This - The Day I Take Over Shit. .
Will Be Remembered N Recognized More Than Spicks With They Four-Twenty
Now I Know Everything I"ve Said Will Probably Get Slept Upon
So I Guess I'll Get World Coverage. . .
If I Just Simply Spread News That I Said I'm The Bomb. . .

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Lemme Address A Few Things. . Structure Is Absolutely Brutal, I Know This. . The ". . ."'s Mean Pauses To Help The Flow. . Trust Me, This Shit Flows, I Don't Post Shit Until What I've Written Has The Flow I Want. . Feedback, Quoting Ya Favorite Lines, All That Is Appreciated. Don't Bring Your Sleeping Bags Tho. . No Sleeping Allowed. . Pz !

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Since you addressed the structure an you said it flows then i wont say anything bout that..........but this was a very very complex (ina good way) rhyme....i got lost at times but my interest was there in its entirety...i would love to hear what it would sound as an audio....oh an this line-

Rhymes Have Gained Eloquence, I Remain Heaven Sent
I Surpassed A Sixth N Made Hip Hop My Seventh Sense

That shit was Ill!~Peace....an thanks for your honesty on my feedback its very much appreciated...

I Said No Sleeping Bags. . I Left Feedback On Pieces Last Night, Long Ass Feedback At That. . Where's The Favor Returned ? Pz.

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Different aproach...but I see you pulled it off nicely. You had some good lines. and some ones you could of worded differently...but they still sounded good.

Your flow was okie..structure was good..this piece i found very more comoplex then your past pieces that i've checked out.

The line quoted by e was fuckin dope...keep that up..and so was this one...

I've Pounded My Revelance. . .
. . . Through The Eyes Who's Ears Have Not Developed
Stinging With My Teachings As The Pen Starts To Swell Up

Dope^^

But basically that was my faverite verse out of them all..you really showed great potential there...keep it up man. i'll be looking out for more of your stuff...peace

If ye got time...peep sommin in my sig...thanks man

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Thanks Rule. . Uppin For More, Payce.

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Rhymes Have Gained Eloquence, I Remain Heaven Sent
I Surpassed A Sixth N Made Hip Hop My Seventh Sense

^ That bar was Ill as fuck ^

I was feeling this. You had a nice approach, and your lines grabbed my attention. I didnt see anything incredably wrong with this piece. You used your emotions, and those are the strongest keys to a song. I was feeling it, your really coming up hommie. This had a good flow, rather simple rhyme scheme... But it didnt effect it in any way. I liked it alot, your did a good job hommie... Keep it up...

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this shit was too hot i haven't been onrapp battles for awhile so i haven't seen some of your better shit but if this isn't better than ya otha shit then i can't give you any advise ya lines were hot nice little punchlines in there and also was able to read it and see the flow so there's nothin you can do to this tomake it better my final approach is this shit was on point

odd gives
5 of 5 mics

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shut the fuck up

even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

dead in middle of little of little italy
little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun