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Old 03-17-04, 09:59 PM   #1
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This Rap Game (Freestyle)

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Here is one I came up today:

I came into this game, thinkin’ that my rhymes were shit/
Kept on thinkin’ that the fuckin’ rap gloves won’t fit/
After showin’ ‘em to people, damn! I was a hit/
Laughter was not there, so my fire had been lit/
I had so much water in my eyes, I thought I could drown the Titanic/
But then I remembered, that it had sunk down the Atlantic/
Or was it the Pacific? Fuck it! I don’t know/
All I know is that I have picked up a bran’ new flo/
I now have learned, to respect this rap game/
Taggin’ around SPuL, as MY rap name/
Hopin’, one day, that it will bring me all the glory/
Or all the ladies, don’t care, ‘longs they horny (haha)/
I be dissin’ lotta niggas. All in clean fun/
Just to prove my rhymes are, hotter than the sun/
And hot as the sun, be no metaphor/
I be the rap king. Now that’s one for sure!/

Feedback would be much appreciated!
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Old 03-18-04, 04:50 AM   #2
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that was good yo! I dont know about everyone else but I liked it.
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Old 03-18-04, 08:30 AM   #3
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thanks, man. Most of that is what I really feel, too. More feedback plz.
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Old 03-18-04, 09:42 AM   #4
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Hmm, o.k, i was feeling some parts, other parts not so much.
This Part:
"I had so much water in my eyes, I thought I could drown the Titanic" Sounded a bit cheesy n cheap but this part:
"Kept on thinkin’ that the fuckin’ rap gloves won’t fit" was good. Keep At It

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Old 03-18-04, 10:24 AM   #5
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not bad, nto bad nothing to say overused topic but some nice line good flow and volcab use coulda used some multis to tighten it up but i'd give it 6/10
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Old 03-18-04, 12:14 PM   #6
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thanks for the feedback guys. I'll go back and take a look at it.
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