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killuminatic -

"U got a brain for this rap game then riddle me this
How u gon battle the God that should've aborted ya cripple fetus"
not the best opener, but it kinda connected. 7/10

"Cripple cuz he cant run spots, when guns cock,
He gets scared and what not, soon as they buck, pop,
His tires gone, Already waist high so to live he suck cock"
I din't like this, you rhymed an odd number of lines, and used cock twice.

favourite line -
"Shit thats something i got to see, Something i'd walk to see
Something u know u cant do, dont try to walk with me,
Missin half your being like a topless tease,
Like a veggie salad topped with beef"

flow - it flowed smoothly, easy enough to read through fluently.
punches - punches weren't really very personal, but some digs where in there.
Multi's - some nice multi's where seen at key points.

ghetto cripple -

"no teeth thats how you like it, midgets or smaller///
you like to fuck virgins so you get down with toddlers///"
wasn't feelin' that line.

"im'a pitbull off his leash//"
isn't that Eminem??

Flow - the flow, i thought was pretty good, well done
punches - a couple of sweet punches
multi's - couldn't see much use of multi's in this verse

vote - killuminatic

good battle, both of you, peace...

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Heres the link
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=121024

Ok heres the breakdown i think killu had this. his flows came harder and punches were koo too. structure was ok could be worked on though
14/20

Ghetto you were pretty much out ran in this battle you need to elevate on flows and punches. structure was ok.
9/20

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Alright, check it. Cripple, your verse sucked hard ass. The flow was terrible, the structure was terrible, the punches sucked hard, it was generic as fuck. All those punches might have been half decent if they weren't played as fuck... use set up lines and wordplay to make it creative. Also work some personals in there... otherwise you could have prewritten this shit a year ago...

kill.. you gotta work on getting rid of filler.. and using set up lines to make your punches stronger. Also work on more wordplay.. your verse was pretty bad but hella better than cripples...

v/ kill.

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umm dis was a okay battle....

opener-kill
structure-kill
punchlines-kill
creativity-kill
multi's-nun
personals-nun
enjoyed-kill...i think ghetto u came week dunn ya lines started gettin short and dat fukked up ya flow

myvote-kill...return da favor da links r in my sig

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U NOT FUKKiN WiTH ME PLaiN N SiMP!...

Da "SiCKEST ON DiS SiTE" LiNE HaS BEEN USED aGaiNST ME 50 x'S...U DUDES aBUSED iT

I thought cripple had a few good lines. That one about being pissed on at birth was alright baptized in sewage or some shit. Keep the votes comin

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Come on 1 more vota and this shits over quit sleepin

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1 more vote bitches. God damn is that too hard? UUUUUUUUUUUPPPPPPPPPPIIIIIIIINNN

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Flow-KILL
Creativity-KILL
Punches-KILL
Content-KILL
Complexity-KILL
Vocab- KILL
Multies-KILL

VOTE- Killuminatic.... he just came with a much better verse in all aspects, beat the kid in pretty much every category thats y he gets my vote..

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Need 1 more vote

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