ight 10 lines, u spit first
Rulz: no dickriding, no crew votes, ussual shit...
Ight spit yo

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kidcard7692: cock-a-doodle niggaz
da916_nigga: I hate whites, blacks, and mexicans...but I love my greens
kidcard7692: Niggas dont eat sprinkles
kidcard7692: i just fell going up the stairs

detroit is also eminem's home town, accept you don't belong there cuz your abandoned cause your feminem/
123 bullet rapid fire, the bullet spins lands in between your nut sack/
these lyrics are demens trying to escape away from the light, trying to bury you in dark before lightness shines bright/
you can't stop my mind from raceing knocking off your sholders, dismantled you and crippled you putting you in a wheel chair/
my talent is rare never glare cause it'll turn back losse and haunt you/
i wanna make sure my shit is 10 feet on top of you, like a shelf with heavy books squashing you/
i'll seletape you mouf to muffle the sound, listnin to you mumble, bitch slapp your face to make you grumble/
tie you to a chair leg, kik it down, watching you stumble, like an earthquake flyin on the ground/
grab a stunn gun for some torcher then execute ya, prod it in your stomach watching you throw up and sick all ova/
seather your head with some headge clippers, sliceing head clean off dropping into a basket/

You like the "Twin Towers" with unstable "structure"//
Ill spit you some "plane" rhymes and youll crumble and rupture//
You betta swallow your tounge and stop runnin yo teeth//
Your IQ is so "low" dat its barried "beneath"//
Ill cut you like a "mixtape" and leave u on da "tracks"
Then Ill have the forensic team pick up whats left of ur back//
Pre-written shit and beating me? Quit your daydream//
Cuz my "flow" will own u like "AIDS" does ur "bloodstream"//
When I spit its like a monsoon of Acid Rain//
Cuz ur gonna get "burned" u know what im sayn...//
Your like a "golfer", "stroken" balls like a faggot//
Told ur mother so she got u a "straightJacket"//
Man you "tick" me off when U take ur "time" to write ideas//
You try to spit hot fire like me, but it comes out explosive diarrhea//

Ight... Lets get some votes...

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kidcard7692: cock-a-doodle niggaz
da916_nigga: I hate whites, blacks, and mexicans...but I love my greens
kidcard7692: Niggas dont eat sprinkles
kidcard7692: i just fell going up the stairs

You like the "Twin Towers" with unstable "structure"//
Ill spit you some "plane" rhymes and youll crumble and rupture//


Damn Dat Line Was Crazy

Poppa Docc Was To Simple U Need To be More Complex
20 Grand Had Much better Everthing And Some Crazy Punches

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UppN yo

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kidcard7692: cock-a-doodle niggaz
da916_nigga: I hate whites, blacks, and mexicans...but I love my greens
kidcard7692: Niggas dont eat sprinkles
kidcard7692: i just fell going up the stairs

20 GraND: cool opening. You had bettter structure.

popa doc: you started off good by talking about his home town, but I think you could have made that better! I also had problems making it rhyme

20 GraND's rhymes flew better, as pimp said: doc needs to be more complex

Vote: 20 GraND

Need votes: http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=123649

koo, still UPPN

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kidcard7692: cock-a-doodle niggaz
da916_nigga: I hate whites, blacks, and mexicans...but I love my greens
kidcard7692: Niggas dont eat sprinkles
kidcard7692: i just fell going up the stairs

thanks for comin out today gentlemen, good fight, good fight. but here's the judgment.

popa doc-i've seen this flow of yours, and i have to say it is one of the most confusing i've ever encountered. i saw potential in it though, very descriptive in the way you were killing him. But you weren't killing him because the flow was way too confusing, and off. it sounds like a freestyle in the most literal sense ever, like i'm reading someone freestyling, but amateurish freestyle though. I felt some of the stabs at multi's though. I suggest you put the bars (these-->//) at the end of the rhyming line, so it's more understandable.

example

I've created so many lines, i'd say that i made rap//
But your wheel of fortune's still spinning, while i'm pat sajack//

you see, you know where the rhyme is exactly. Decent verse altogether though.

20 grand-I like how you started out, because you spoke fact in the first line. Or at least what was obvious to most. And nothing stings more in a battle than pure fact. You took it from a readers perspective and noticed his lack of structure, and made it an ill obsevational line, which was personal in itself. Steady flow and more than adequate punches kept me reading this one. Nice, nice.

so my votes go to 20 grand.

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Aiight 20 grand has this on Lockup. HE came harder and his punches flowed. He had complexity.

popa doc had some shit goin on but he got shutdown

20 Grand-8/10
popa doc-6/10

Return da Favor http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=123748

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20 grand came way harder in this battle



You like the "Twin Towers" with unstable "structure"//
Ill spit you some "plane" rhymes and youll crumble and rupture//
that line just said it alll that line just killed him