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07-05-04, 09:54 PM
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*Smile* (Feedback plz)
IP: 5043 32F4
*Smile (The Eyes Of A Young African Teenager)* (Inspired by all my colored friends throughout Winnipeg city) (title Inspired by the great Tamia (singer)...) everyday I have a excruciating struggle in life and at school~ I live in a all-white community and discriminating me is the rule~ so once I wake up I put on my eye-liner and my favourite lipstick~ I try to put a *smile* on my face and think of the true politics~ Mr. Mandela, Ms. Parks both overcame the hate in they lives~ pain, anger and other things pile up in my brain's archives~ *school bus comes* I get on and people stare ... Am I different?~ it's like they never saw a African before...Was I born a accident?~ I arrived at school and made my way to physical education~ last pick on a team...no one likes me thats a big complication~ I get shoved to the floor and they calling me a porch monkey~ then call me a illiterate and I say "fuck it" cuz I'm not a monkey~ after that class time went by so quickly then school finally ends~ after this day resided I lost all my remaining goddamn confidence~ that very night I cried myself to sleep in the fuckin' darkness~ in my dreams my mental suffering fades away in evanesce~ while still in my dream I see my ancestors farming on their land~ but than a KKK member came struck them no time to understand~ right before my relative died I swear he looked straight at my face~ and mouthed the words "fight for your rights don't be a disgrace"~ a split second later I woke up.....and inside I contained a lions pride~ and I shouted " respect my entire race let that be known worldwide~ ^^^wow I put emotion in there so I need no hate............................ and to all the white people on this site don't take this offensive......... I wasn't saying that all white people are like that I know there are nice people of that race & I respect that and if you do take that offensively Im sorry for the misunderstanding....................... and people note I'm not African/Jamaican........... and also this was made because I wanted to do a topical on this and I wrote this right now since no one will accept my bitchslapped threads at all............................................... ...............
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07-05-04, 09:58 PM
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Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: 3220 75B9
that had good structure flow and vocab and unlike most of the stuff on here it was intelligent lol
r u a gurl or was this fictional
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07-05-04, 10:02 PM
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no im not a girl!!!!!!!!!!!!! read the first things I typed!!!!!!!!!!!! it was in the eyes of a african teenager who happens to be a girl anywayz thanks for the positive feedback much appreciation  !
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07-05-04, 11:24 PM
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uppin 4 some goddamn feedback peeps!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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07-06-04, 12:27 AM
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really good spit,talks about serious stuff.keep spittin'.
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07-06-04, 04:55 PM
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uuuuuuuuppppppppppiiiiiiinnnnnn 4 fffffffeeeedddbbaaaaccckkkk!!!!!!!!!!
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10-24-04, 04:55 PM
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uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppp.....................
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10-24-04, 05:38 PM
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Get Cooked Hoe
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IP: 3240 794D
word nice piece good vocab good flowin nice mayne keep doing it ya thang
put an feedback in my open mic'z the lightning and women abusing check dem 2 out.............word
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