for sure you got this one cuz i didn't check my spelling i re read it and was confused

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you can't get to me cuz
U can't Touch tha Untouchble
Break tha Unbreackable
Shake tha Unshakeable
Move tha Unmovealble

yo, i;m sorry biggie; next time kill ya bro for rushin ya:
biggie:you did have some decent punches, ya flow was good too, work on ya spellin like ya said and i think you''ll be good
smokescreen:ya shit was funny as hell, your flow was good, punches were dope, personals hit hard.......ima have to give this to you
VOTE:smokeskreen

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Biggie_XL

well y'all ready to hear a spit starit form the B-I-G to tha G-I-E
cuz i mic and som beat and my fanatci is all a fella needs
->>spelling is bad and first line is way stretched 3/10

cuz now it time to match witts with tha Smoke sreen
and after this shit this fool will turn envey green
->>its decent 5/10

cuz wit ma 2 fist ill kill this lame excuse fo an emcee
cuz this fagget hear can't spit a rhyme what will evan some close to bend me
->>second line stretched ok punch 4/10

cuz ill have tha motha fucka areal line then i Cock
and next think ya now what left of him is lined in chalk
->>good second line i was feelin this 6/10

cua ill spit thid like bad boy cuz i ma special delivery
and fo this fagget i wont pull ouy ma cavelrie
->>doesnt rhyme at all 3/10

cuz ill i nee ma 2 fist and a mic in hand
and thin emcee dead like Da Band
->>ok punch 4/10

cuz see this is that shit were i prevail
kill a bitch wit baseball bat and nail
->>baseball bat and a nail? cmon dogg 3/10

im unthouch able cuz shit gon phase me
i spit like this and it make people Swazy
->>thats why i bust back it dont phase me
->>when he drop take his glock and im swayze
->>2pac & Biggie-Runnin'
->>bitin' 0/10

->>total:28/80 35%


$MOKESKREEN

I just seen lights flast before my eyes it was a unforgettable time
Cuz I almost died from laughin' too hard after I read your first line
->>pretty good opener 5/10

I'mma give u some tips since this ya first, and I'm keepin it real
Invest in a nice rag, some turtle wax and go polish ya skills
->>good punch 6/10

Stay in class don't drop out Biggie please u need to stay in school
Take a look at the rules 10 - 15 lines for your verse you illiterate fool
->>addin words to make the first line fit but ok punch 5/10

We just started and I passed ya I’m bout to set the nitro- off
Biggie you wouldn’t “XL” if u was the programmer of Micro~soft (get it)
->>no not really 3/10

How does it feel to live a life and know u a coward
But can’t do nothin’ bout it cuz your dumb ass allow-it
->>doesnt make sense 3/10

->>total 22/50 44%

Biggie it was an alright first verse just keep elevatin and dont ever bite it just makes you look like a herb

Smokescreen i was really feelin the first 3 bars but kinda fell off at the end you still took it easy though

->>v/Smokescreen

I'm not hatin with low percents...100% is the best textcee on the site so low isnt bad while youre elevating

\/hit these up honestly\/

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thanks for the feedback...uppin

^^^ and its a program that's used on microsoft call Excel for those of u that don't know

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READY FOR WAR

CHECK THIS OUT IN OPEN MIC...NEED FEEDBACK
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135097

LETS GO!!!!!!!!!!

opener=smoke
puches=smoke
flow=smoke
personals=both
vocab=smoke
closer=smoke

biggie you really didnt come hard on this battle at all you stuck wit the basic ryhme scheme i know you got better stuff

ovrall vote smoke wins

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go vote on my battle wit tragedee and then ill poll

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