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Old 07-26-04, 05:53 PM   #1
N.E.T KEY
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white gold

IP: DC13 A694

i be tha master of cermoneus
harmoneus
muther fuckers cant see us
we the g'est
net
straight cumin up thuggin
luvin
you
and me
peacefully
i be
white gold
life story untold
straight from tha pen 2 tha paper
story sold
now i dont wanna cause controversy
because i no dat every rapper, they thank j.c
but i like to say i did it i got here on my own
no help fom god or jesus shit i was barely grown
an u took away from me wat was most important
blarrin my vision makin it all distorted
i was axin questions getin no replys
unxplainable reasons had me excpecting my demise
despise
me not
fee world am in knot
tangled up twisted an all i got is wat i no an not bin told
dis mo fucker rite here
he be white gold
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Old 07-26-04, 06:28 PM   #2
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first off ya structure is terrible////gotta get another style crackin seriously no hate but just tellin you facts....anyways....besides that a eh read....not really my kinda piece just work on your structure,concepts,flow,and vocab...and you'll be aight

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Old 07-26-04, 08:09 PM   #3
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basically i feel da same way u have to get a better structure so that u can make your multi's sound good and just start flowin about something
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