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07-30-04, 03:04 AM
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If I Died Tomorrow Would You Still Love Me
IP: 58D4 2609
If i died tomorrow would you still love me,hold me in your arms and bring me to glory,rock me to the days that await me,and let my body fall weightless,the pain i'm feelin inside has robbed me of my life and its good times,so bring me up to see the light ,let that fire burn bright.i know there much more out there...war,racisim,killin and turnin whores.if i died tomorrow my life would'nt be the same because my war would be over and there would be no more pain. people would remember all the shit they did when i was down with there foot at my chin,treated me like shit beat my ass wit sticks and call me a silly little bitch. now they sayin how good i was and done shit fo 'em.they lie cause they holdin there fears down inside but dont worry i cant black ur eyes,but if i died tomorrow would you still love me treat me i'm your homie and never disown me and know are love will always grow on and never devour.
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07-30-04, 01:21 PM
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Thank You, Come Again
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IP: 8D48 2106
nope....
lmao
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07-31-04, 12:27 AM
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IP: F927 EE24
what does nope mean?
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07-31-04, 01:15 AM
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fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
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IP: 75DF D0BD
big chase instead of bein a jerk out 4 himself n ur crew shit do wut ur supposed 2 on post n give advice not haterism peace out nice poem
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07-31-04, 02:41 AM
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Light Weight
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IP: 3C80 F381
ay nice poem...like how u kept askin dat question...in otha poems it gets old but u neva really played it out an u used it sparringly...keep it comin...peace
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07-31-04, 02:56 AM
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Thank You, Come Again
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IP: 8D48 2106
im jk.......first of alll nice piece.....raw cool it i dont wanna have to beef again annd merk ya.......i was jk and it said would youb miss me? nope get it?!?!...
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07-31-04, 07:58 PM
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Vendetta the K.O. King
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IP: 78D8 9CA9
Couldnt figure out the rhyme scheme on this - maybe its just me, and my need for structure. Some abstract stuff gets me, but this seemed more like a commentary to me. Not that thats bad - but just different. Nice drop - I agree with mexican on the repetition. Good lookin.
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08-01-04, 02:25 AM
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IP: AF3D 05DD
Yea...I think this would of been alot easier to read if it had some sort of structure to it...but, it wasn't terribly bad at all...infact, it had great potential...I really enjoyed the theme, personally. Interesting concept...keep on writing and try to elevate...
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08-01-04, 07:53 PM
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COLD
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IP: 5671 DBDD
good poem you got your grown woman on ma just set it up easy to read next time.thats love some deep shit word and most niggas couldnt answer those questions good drop
check my shit out and give some feedback
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08-02-04, 10:30 PM
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IP: 7C6F 690C
Its nice and aight but need a lil structure to it but yo its tight...
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