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Old 10-02-04, 04:54 PM   #1
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...War/Terrorism...

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I Was Just Thinking About This Subject And Decided To Write A Peice About It.....


I Hear Agonizing Screams That Seem To Penatrate The Shelter Roof
Out Of Anyone's Control It's Taken Over, No-one Can Stop This Fued
My Mind Projects Formidable Images That Could Daunt the Darkest Heart
Left Inprinted On My Skull, Any Hope Of Survival Is Beyond Afar
A Lay awake At Night, Who Could Sleep In These Abismal Conditions
Will We Be Free? There Has Been A Build Of Doubtful Suspisions
Atmosphere Is Clouded As Are My Thought Both Seem Unsure
Confusion Is Amongst Us, War Has Taken Over, For That I Can Be Sure
A Small Infant Crying, Are These Concequences Deserved
The Damage Has Bin Executed, Hard To Translate Into Words
The Pain Is Immense The Heartbroken Families Pain Is Felt
Young Man And Women, A Babys Life Taken, Yet Heads Are Still Held?
Suffering Is Forever Scarred Upon The Relatives Of Those Lives Taken
Hurtful Tears Are Shead, Nothing Can Relate To Thier Eternal Aching
Hundreds Of Lives Snatched In these Violent Acts I'm Merley Stating Fact
Causing Pain And Hurt, These Are The Results of Terorrist Acts

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Old 10-02-04, 08:12 PM   #2
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reminds me of myself, when i first began. great memories, nice topic.
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Old 10-02-04, 08:44 PM   #3
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lol, Yeah Thanks, I Think. Yeah This Was My First Topical... Shared With Tha Site................
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Old 10-03-04, 03:58 AM   #4
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Uppin fOr Some Feedback Please...........................
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Old 10-03-04, 04:43 AM   #5
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lmfao it was good....but why tha fuck you change ya name thats wack as fuck lmfao i liked LE an this wasnt your first topical i remember all them dope ones you used to do.....now i got that outta my system i am calm....
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Old 10-03-04, 05:23 AM   #6
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Huh.... I Don't Get Ya I Aint L.E...................
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Old 10-03-04, 05:36 AM   #7
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oh sorry lmfao sorry who are you?....the avy confoooooosed me...
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Old 10-03-04, 09:39 AM   #8
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ayo man that shit was tight...specially for a first topical...flow was mos def on point...vocab was the way i like it-complex but not overly complicated...and i feel its message was delivered in a couple different ways...keep up dog...1
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Old 10-03-04, 11:57 AM   #9
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hmmm.. nice topic... alot of topic are like this except your was more unique...... had allot of thoughs and the imagery was good.... structre was iight you.. remind me allot of 9/11
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Old 10-03-04, 02:28 PM   #10
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Old 10-05-04, 07:25 AM   #11
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Old 10-05-04, 02:20 PM   #12
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not to bad..for the most part..it's just really strectched in many places..
keep up though...peace
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