feedback on this you fags........

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Good Shit Worth Reading.......

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|Heinous|Malevolent|Sinister|

That's pretty fucking evil to me.....

damn now i got more rescept for both of ya'll holla me for a collab any way the song was good and the word i agree wit sometimes i'm doing the same thing. i think you flow helped out the feeling in the song. i don't think ya'll needed the echo but nice touch. Chorus was ahhhhhhh not as good as the verse so over all a 9/10 great drop yall and hit me up wit a collab.

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nvm.. i posted in the wrong thread....

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That's pretty fucking evil to me.....

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very nice drop, I can feel this cuz I am a strong christian and I kno how it feels goin through tuff stuff but if this is tru maybe its a fictional drop but if its tru (I kno it may sound cheesy) but I encourage you to read some scriptures and pray, God wont always tell u stuff directly he shows you in glimpses and signs, so be on the look out for those and embrace themwhen u see them. But um......nice drop keep them comin yall

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LOL its actualy made to be a song...
i'm half christian....

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Werdlife son. That was nice. Bomb ass flow, could use more multis if youre really using it for a song. Lyrics was pretty good from both but i feel that Paramik dropped much harder on the lyricism point. Chorus' should be where all the lines rhyme, for some reason it doesnt seem right if it doesnt. As in the intro and shit i dont think the words could go well in a song but for a music video yes. Just think bout what exactly youre doing before you do it. About the flow, it was good but stop trying to make the lines go straight down cuz thats not really what counts. The verses are supposed to be at least like 12 bars each, least thats how i see it so yall shoulda dropped more, i understand about feedback on rv tho. Good read, could use some work.....8/10

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bump bump bump.

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Bump/.............................

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