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Old 07-21-02, 01:39 AM   #1
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Question new to the board, feedback appreciated

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new to the board, i never really done anything like this before and i'd just like a little feedback. i dont really have a topic to go off on but since this is a battle site i guess i'll just throw out a couple of those types of lines, i guess they are more of hype lines since i'm not battlin no one...


Bars and hooks, my pad's like a Stephen King book
Bigger than Suge, w/ literature leaving you shook
take a look, money's in my future like Lenny Cooke
I got took, 3rd pick, in '86 i'm a rook
See what you missing? i'm heartless but my conscience is kickin
If you listen then you realize my content is sickening
Linguistic precision, on point like laser incisions
Only through fission, will you seperate my mic and my visions
I can't be touched, fair warning if i ever get rushed
i clutch an automatic that i'm likely to bust
You must, not oppose if you want me to trust
Talk too much and i'll rip your stomach up like a crunch
Murder is the case, when i spit a bar in your face
I erase foes, and put my men up in there place
What i got on my waist, will have u praying like Mase
If you're in god's grace, blood wont be the last thing you taste
I put time in my rhymes, so when i spit it shines
And finds a way to intertwine inside your mind
You breathing's a crime, a legitimate fine should be assigned
Jay-Z Blueprinted the game, but i made the designs
When i'm in the zone, my style can't be cloned
And it's written in stone, that i alone, will own raps throne
Like Caeser in Rome, you moan, as i pierce to the bone
And phone in your murder, verbal death is condoned ---

aiight, i dont want to bore you, so i'll stop there, feedbacks appreciated. peace
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Old 07-21-02, 02:04 AM   #2
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this was aight, keep elevatin'... if you had a topic that you rhymed on, you could be nice... you got nice rhymes an flow an all that shit, find a topic... i can't think too good right now, tomorrow i'll leave better feed back...just tryin' to give feed back, cuz no one else does...
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Old 07-21-02, 12:35 PM   #3
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Yo i think this piece was hot right here, keep doin your thing, check some of my shit out....
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Old 07-21-02, 03:13 PM   #4
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I like this dunn, you got some nice vocab

keep elevatin

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Old 07-23-02, 11:10 PM   #5
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thanks to those of you who gave me some feedback, i appreciate it. like i said, i'm new to the whole computer scene, is there anything on the site where like there is already a topic u can rhyme about or anything like that? aiight, thanks, and ninoscar i'll check out your stuff

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Old 07-23-02, 11:16 PM   #6
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you this was tight kid ya just started out? ya can elevate wit some more practice keep it up, don't let these Catz be sleepin' on ya shit. reply to other Catz posts to


Peace out Homez
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Old 07-23-02, 11:24 PM   #7
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this shit was ill
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Old 07-25-02, 12:00 AM   #8
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again, thanks for the feedback, and yeah i'm new at this, i'll try to post more, i just been working a lot lately.

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Old 07-25-02, 03:52 AM   #9
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you pretty nice if you get on a specific topic than you would rip it.........

if you want to than we can work on a colab .....
thats pretty much how introduced myself to the board, through colabs..

if you want a place to rhyme on specific topics than go to a cypher.......

if you go to a crew thread and impress someone enough than maybe theyll pick you up......
gettin in a crew is the best way to break out on dis board in mah opinion.......
anywayz jus keep elevatin and hit me up if you down 4 a colab

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try to give feedback on some of mah shit too
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