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01-29-05, 09:30 PM | #1 | ||||||
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.:: Lost Ghost ::.
IP: 0825 899A
I walk through the wet, the rain plastering hair to my skull,
as I shed memories to sweep away this dark day's dull. Memories as I played games, observing the grinning face of my little boy, Shadows sweeping happiness away, dark hands shredding joy. I walk through the wet, though I still remain dry, as I think to a sunnier place, and say my goodbyes to the people I once loved, as now I walk as a ghost, devoid of the moments that I still miss the most. I walk through the wet, yet dry in my hand is a picture frame. As my families souls were reaped, as death lays his dark claim. I remember the arson's devils work and the life-taking fire, sending flying souls above to add to His Heavenly choir. I walk through the wet, reminiscencing momentous moments, like Kodak commercial pictures, with saddening components. All of it's forever gone, and by the hands of a single man, of the simplistic souls that can still sweep joy from this desolate land. I walk through the wet, mostly dry like I'm crossing through time warps, as my eyes recall these happy days through the lifeless eyes of a moving corpse. The burnt-out remains of a house awaits me down the quiet road, beckoning me to the ash, packed with old memories that my mind also knows. I walk through the wet, thoughts flitting through my crowded mind, of smiling children playing and my wife's lovely grin, painfully kind. I may be six feet under, but I still walk on two feet in this sad place, where I'm bound to the restless results where my life was lived, along with that laughing face. |
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01-30-05, 09:49 AM | #2 | ||||||
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01-30-05, 12:23 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 0825 899A
Uppin' for some feedback. o_O
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02-01-05, 04:33 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 3240 794D
>< Uppin', damnit.
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02-01-05, 04:53 PM | #5 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 9C92 533D
this was a fiya drop...i gotta give it at least a 9/10...flow was flawless...so was the structure...and ya didnt go into any cheezy/wannabe metaphors...u had a good rhyme scheme and all ya lines made sense...nice topic too...
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02-01-05, 06:32 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 3240 794D
Thanks, man. I've made up some strange topics in my time: a robot who is the minion of people who took over earth and it's thoughts, and a story of a dead person who has to remain in hell in return for helping his friend not commit suicide but he does so anyways... Maybe I'll post 'em some day.
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02-02-05, 04:14 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 3240 794D
Uppin' for some feedback.
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02-04-05, 07:06 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 0825 899A
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