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05-02-05, 11:07 AM | #1 | |||
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**Victimisation**
IP: A236 DEBC
Woke up in a cold sweat, my mind full of regret
Head pounding, questioning why I feel so upset My feet tied, I struggle but I can’t get them loose So bruised, wondering if I been a victim of abuse Explore my surroundings, situation dumbfounding The loud music next door now so sweet sounding Where am I? Open my mouth but I can’t scream Eyes heavy, realize he’s taken this to the extreme Opportunities came I missed them, what a shame Coz from then on, me as his property he’d proclaim And I blame myself, coz everything was my fault My lips sealed shut I forgot about the first assault Voices interrupt my thoughts, my body turns tense I close my eyes, might think I’m dead, my defense Grip so intense, then gently puts me to the ground My tomb already laid, insures, I’ll never be found A day past no more, I knew that from the sunlight A pilot of my own plane, now the end of this flight Feel so weak, my hands raised like I’m being lifted My worries all gone, into everlasting sleep I drifted (feed)
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05-02-05, 05:00 PM | #2 | |||
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IP: ACFA 2363
anyone feel free to leave feed............
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05-03-05, 03:28 AM | #3 | |||
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IP: 8AE9 8270
uppin ya'll...................
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05-03-05, 11:31 AM | #5 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 3240 794D
Waddup Mizz Fyre...this DBW....anyway. This was a real deep piece...prolly one of the best ones I've seen, I felt the emotion in it, vocab always on point, flow as well and the story was actually touching,especiall the end....keep droppin fam.
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05-03-05, 11:59 AM | #6 | |||||
Cus I Jus Ma$fit Dis Shit
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IP: 964F D870
whats hood fam?...my first time readin sumthin by u...nice deep dopeness right here...i gotta keep a eye out for yo drops...props 9/10...peep my OMz too...links in sig
-DB
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05-03-05, 12:01 PM | #7 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: B6A6 A397
tight ass ish
check out my freestyle drop |
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05-03-05, 05:58 PM | #8 | |||
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IP: 38DA BE91
^^^thanx ya'll uppin fore more feed..........
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05-03-05, 07:36 PM | #9 | ||||
E-Style, Bitch.
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IP: 70F4 EB0E
good stuff mizz
nice flow an vocab, structure cant be faulted, sent a message thru rhymes, thats always a good thing, ya just floatin your creative talent like always, deep stuff 8/10 keep 'em droppin babygirl
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05-03-05, 07:46 PM | #10 | ||||
Light Weight
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IP: 0268 34D0
I like this piece right here, structure was nice, flow was cool, creative as always...kept me in suspense
overall 9/10 Return tha favor |
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05-04-05, 11:13 AM | #11 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: 91F7 E22B
aight check it
i see all these people givin ya near perfect scores cuz ya know they suckin up to ya!!!! structure - can't fault ya on this, it was perfect lines were not stretched and every one was kept together. flow - flow was on point, perfect structure grants you a decent flow all the way through......... topic - the idea for ya open mic was nice, ya delivered a message through ya rhymes like teph said and ya didn't fall off at all, ya stayed with it all the way. vocab - the vocab was nice, a couple of parts where it was real decent but some points where it seemed rather basic to me...so ya cud work on that. overall i think it was a tight drop - 7/10 |
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05-04-05, 07:58 PM | #12 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: 52B6 1AD6
this was like woua! pretty pretty dope,nice structure,very nice vocab
great OM |
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05-06-05, 05:34 AM | #13 | |||
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IP: B213 3FEA
^^^thanx alot ya'll.........much appreciated
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05-07-05, 02:12 PM | #14 | ||||
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
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