Voted For: Premanition

you lackin' ammunition Preman you on some Pre man shit
man if you take away this kid's facade..it'll just deman him
OK..........
derailin' this cat so far...his bitch ass will never see mention
he has a train of thought... n' that shit has a steam engine!
NO...........
your streak endin' cuz.. the only streak that i'm rueing for
is the bloody stains on my carpet when I'm through wit ya
who this chump? Seriously just confess you a loser bitch
kids askin "who Preman?"..are fuckin' questionin' evolution!
ya cred is loosened... if he considered the matter he'd fall
cred short like high schoolers applyin for masters degree jobs
WTF DAT SHIT DONT RHYME N WHERE DOES IT STOP?????
=5/10 U NEED TO ELEVATE ALOT...........

VS

Your verse more effective wen ‘mirror image’ reflected
Only shock you’d bring be if a punch of yours connected
GOOD........
Bitch them lines getting rejected like a faulty bar code
And you ain’t be’coming a custom’ like a dodgy car load
NICE
Sold ur soul to the devel but he turned down the exchange
Shard my ‘sole’ on ur level in a place where gravity reigns
LOL
Just ‘cavity’ chains cos them threats are ‘hollow’ n plain
Tie u down to my ‘lines’, only time ur ass on the ‘train’
AIGHT
Aka the ‘mirror’, ‘image’ broken as I watch your ass fall
Then ask you politely….’who is the greatest of them all?’
TITE
=9/10 A GOOD VERSE DAWG............

V/Premanition FOR COMIN ALOT HARDER............

Voted For: Premanition

-Shard-
you lackin' ammunition Preman you on some Pre man shit
man if you take away this kid's facade..it'll just deman him
^^^^ 7/10 decent opener... could use some work

derailin' this cat so far...his bitch ass will never see mention
he has a train of thought... n' that shit has a steam engine!
^^^^ 6/10 nah not feeling it... sorry

your streak endin' cuz.. the only streak that i'm rueing for
is the bloody stains on my carpet when I'm through wit ya
^^^^ 8/10 pretty good hit

who this chump? Seriously just confess you a loser bitch
kids askin "who Preman?"..are fuckin' questionin' evolution!
^^^^ 7/10 decent hit

ya cred is loosened... if he considered the matter he'd fall
cred short like high schoolers applyin for masters degree jobs
^^^^ 6/10 nah not feeling the closer... sorry

34/50 = %68


-Premanition-
Your verse more effective wen ‘mirror image’ reflected
Only shock you’d bring be if a punch of yours connected
^^^^ 7/10 decent opener... second line kinda played out

Bitch them lines getting rejected like a faulty bar code
And you ain’t be’coming a custom’ like a dodgy car load
^^^^ 7/10 i like the wordplay on the first line... decent second line

Sold ur soul to the devel but he turned down the exchange
Shard my ‘sole’ on ur level in a place where gravity reigns
^^^^ 8/10 good hit... i like the wordplay, hit and personal

Just ‘cavity’ chains cos them threats are ‘hollow’ n plain
Tie u down to my ‘lines’, only time ur ass on the ‘train’
^^^^ 7/10 pretty good wordplay and hit

Aka the ‘mirror’, ‘image’ broken as I watch your ass fall
Then ask you politely….’who is the greatest of them all?’
^^^^ 8/10 hahaha... good closer... first line could of used work

37/50 = %74


Vote: Premanition




**no hate to either of you, just honest opinion**



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^^^^^^need some honest votes^^^^^^

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