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mizz fyre 1 16.67%
Paranoid 5 83.33%
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Old 05-30-05, 02:39 PM   #1
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mizz fyre vs Paranoid

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Topic: Undisputed Thoughts
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Old 05-31-05, 03:15 PM   #2
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Old 05-31-05, 04:30 PM   #3
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Old 05-31-05, 05:36 PM   #4
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Dawn breaks, gently I arouse from my dream, finally awake
momma busy baking the cake, I feel numb, my head aches
Sweet music playing, the whole family here, silently praying
Wishing me well, for my big day, my thoughts are swaying
I close the curtain, walk outside, the rain lashes my brown skin
I grin at the thought of my family saying my future should begin
“Come inside” my daddy calls, its time for you to get changed
I feel sadness, by me this marriage couldn’t even be arranged

The mirror reflecting my image, really slim and almost pretty
Witty, maybe, but still I’m under the power of the “committee”
My thoughts are undisputed, clear that I don’t want to proceed
My heart bleeds, I need to leave if I have a chance to succeed
Everybody’s smiling, they’re all dressed in their favorite suits
Boots pricey, I recite my favorite song, try to forget my roots
Embraces from close friends and enemies who make amends
Giving me money and things but my family’s love transcends

I glance at him standing proud, waiting sweetly for me to arrive
My energy I try to revive, so nervous, to him I anxiously strive
My skirt draping on the floor, I’m the first one through the door
But my minds doing overtime, I don’t want to be here anymore
I turn around suddenly, my heels slamming hard on the ground
Oblivious to where I’m heading but home ain’t where I’m bound
catch my auntie mumbling, I always knew that this girl was insane
I think to myself, that ain’t true for once I’m using my own brain
And my thoughts will see me through whatever life has planned
Make a stand, unquestionable I’m finally under my own command……….
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Old 06-02-05, 09:51 PM   #5
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Undisputed Thoughts
Unable to eat properly, just cause I’m poor wishing to Christ
Judgements such as life, the chance of me shining isn’t Right
Apparently fate excluded me from all the political Decisions
On such undiscovered missions, I’m stuck picturing Visions
Such visions that get me frustrated, even more and more Hated
Undisputed thoughts grasping my intelligence making me Rated
My reality was broken apart, over all the unbelievable Fatality
Furious thoughts and dream, such emptiness created Mentality
I tried not to think about the disrespect, friendship didn’t Connect
I felt stuck in confusion, feel never the less but only a Suspect
The purity of my life’s sanity, really felt like an scary Illusion
Dropped in the myth of a delusion, I couldn’t snap the Confusion
The hate was evident, I could understand nothings ever Correct
Hungry and all, I was always upset, life can never be Perfect
Trying not to get to serious, the hunger gets just to Furious
I begin to ask myself why, I think imperious and act so Curious
Somehow I need to look for repetitive answers for my own Rights
Keep on with the education, being able to see the bright Lights
When my mom offered delicious food to my dad, I was Surprised
Through the yelling, the actions of mom must have been Disguised
I wish for a better living, moving would be for the greater Story
Competitive rareness would bring fate to me, so I’d prove Glory
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Old 06-02-05, 10:06 PM   #6
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Voted For: Paranoid

Pretty close one here...

But, I'm feeling Paranoid a little more on this one. IMO, he had better imagery, and I could really feel his emotion that he put into this. This was a very deep topic, however, and both did a nice job, but like I said, I am feeling Paranoid a little more due to his emotion and imagery. I could tell he worked hard at this topic, so I am giving him my vote.

Mizz fire, I was pretty surprised. You are one of the best topical writers on this board, but you delivered much less than what you are fully capable of. In my eyes, you just fell off a little bit, but its no big deal. Just make sure that you give it your all next time and not take it lightly.

V/ Paranoid

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Old 06-02-05, 10:08 PM   #7
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This was feedback posted for Paranoid

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Checking the polls................................
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
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Old 06-02-05, 10:10 PM   #8
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Quote:
Originally Posted by .Barz Of Steel.
Voted For: Paranoid

Pretty close one here...

But, I'm feeling Paranoid a little more on this one. IMO, he had better imagery, and I could really feel his emotion that he put into this. This was a very deep topic, however, and both did a nice job, but like I said, I am feeling Paranoid a little more due to his emotion and imagery. I could tell he worked hard at this topic, so I am giving him my vote.

Mizz fire, I was pretty surprised. You are one of the best topical writers on this board, but you delivered much less than what you are fully capable of. In my eyes, you just fell off a little bit, but its no big deal. Just make sure that you give it your all next time and not take it lightly.

V/ Paranoid

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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 06-02-05, 10:12 PM   #9
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This was feedback posted for mizz fyre

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Nice Babygirl but Im Just CHECKIN Polls>>>>.......
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Old 06-03-05, 10:24 AM   #10
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hmmmm......o.k uppppin............................
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Old 06-03-05, 10:33 AM   #11
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Quote:
Originally Posted by art-stica~Mente
DAWG SHE AINT THE BEST..........SHE'S AVERAGE



hmmm just get those topics so we can get our rematch battle done
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Old 06-03-05, 10:35 AM   #12
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^^ uh huh..............................................
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 06-03-05, 10:37 AM   #13
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you got them yet..................................
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Old 06-03-05, 10:38 AM   #14
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Huh uh............................................
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 06-03-05, 10:39 AM   #15
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where are they?...................................
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