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Who made my Sig- Shief BITCH!

Voted For: C-Hood

You had good structure and openings....
but you came in a bit weak on the closure

ya body i'll be dismantled when i squeeze the pump/
forget chewin....they gone use a straw when they feed ya lunch!!!/
i guess this was aiight

you second in line to me but you not that far/
if you divide you wins by your loses you'll find out who you are(2/4=2...he is number 2 next to me...get it)
a bit weak....need to elevate

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Who made my Sig- Shief BITCH!

Voted For: Blac-Out

Blac-Out took this shit..

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7 Day Theory

Voted For: Blac-Out

yo that was hot ...cuz a nigga like me from the hood ...dont know if you are but thats real nice ...dont get it twicted its not all that but its good...i like a that gun talk wit the slugs ...next time come up with some better ish tho

thanks...................uppin ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

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Voted For: C-Hood

see hood........, you just aint nuttin buh a bitch whore
runnin ya lip, is the type of shit, that i got clips for
^^Not much of a punch here...4/10
so dont even step foward, i get enuff of this shit
act slick, then ill leave a slug, stuck in ya lip
^^not much of a punch here neither..this is gangsta talk...not punches..4/10
that snub'll just spit, if you act like you da shit in the streets
you aint a hustler, nigga ur profession is gettin police
^^basic here....5/10
im equipped wit the heat, i stay wit a gat in my palm
and if you dont wanna get shot wit it, then fall back and b calm
^^still...this is gangsta talk...4/10
if you dont kno about me, then its best that u research
cus ill leave pot holes in ya chest and ya t-shirt
^^c'mon..this gangsta talk still...3/10
wen i let the heat burst
i use to think other niggas on Rv was wack, buh now i see that C's worst
^^OK punch for once...6/10
so u need to get a tutor, as soon as possible
cus otherwise, urll be in hospital, as soon as i pop at you
^^poor rhyming here..still wit gangsta talk...3/10
dont try to fuck wit me, just keep ya shit in order
cus the only way urll beat me is if i write ur rhymes for ya
^^not much of a punch....3/10
try to step then ima destroy ya, so dont try to be hood
so my best advice for ya bitch ass is to be good
^^again...punch ...not gangsta talk..4/10

OK...more than half of your verse consisted of gangsta talk.That talking about killin him n shit is good for a set-up or filler...but not as a punch.That punch is sopposed to diss.Had some ite multis at start like in the opener.But then you had poor rhyming like in that 2nd to last bar.order/for ya?possible/pop at you?Only punch I really saw was that C's worst one.So work on punches..a lot.

you second in line to me but you not that far/
if you divide you wins by your loses you'll find out who you are(2/4=2...he is number 2 next to me...get it)
^^hmm....creative here...7/10
you say your back...but no one ever new you was gone/
wit my lyrics they do matrix stunts like choke you wit a cordless phone/
^^poor rhyming...gone/phone?...n not much of a punch..in set-up..all no one know you shit is played..3/10
why post when everyone knows that you can't beat me/
its for sure that you garbage...you was herbed by the wackestmc/
^^BAsic....4/10
thats a shame...wit my keyboard and fingers I be bashin lames/
you should know bout fiya cuz Mizz Fyre showed you her flames/
^^NO....3/10
yo talk smack and that'll make me bring the 'blac-'out'/
it'll make you 'blac' out and show you what blacks bout/
^^said blac too much...but still a personal..5/10
the way i do mc's they say its a shame/
playin hoops and gettin a good grade on paper you still couldn't bring yo A-Game/*
^^I see where you going with this...but it ain't connecting..5/10
ya body i'll be dismantled when i squeeze the pump/
forget chewin....they gone use a straw when they feed ya lunch!!!/
^^MEh...4/10

Ok..you also need to work on your rhyming n punches.That 2nd bar...phone n gone doesn't rhyme together very well.Ur opener was your best line.Never seen shit line that used as a punch.It's good you got an idea of what a punch is n your'e not self glorifing or gangsta talking.SO you got my vote..but if Montana actaully dissed..he woulda had this.U still need work.

Vote-C-Hood
RTF

Voted For: Blac-Out

C-hood:
Not a good verse, wasnt feeling the seperation of bars...Few hard hitters tho, Closer was good, an you opened ya verse better than Blac-out too....Structure was awful, an wordplay was nothin too, kind of basic, Need to be more creative an use ya punches more efictely, good attempt tho

Blac-out:

better verse from you, Puns were straight, opener was weak tho, Could of used the clip line more effectively, Turned it into a punch instead of just gunplay, but other then that, not much i can fault, you get my vote homie....

RTF Here: http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=205031
or my vote will be removed

Vote=Blac-out, more consistancy in his drop.

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