yo i'm uppin for this guy even though i can't vote but to me it seems like the rhymes were forced in a way but it still was some good punches

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Voted For: Thassarap

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I'll have you lookin from under your cap like a bottle of sprite
digest my words cause it's the only way you swallow delight
^^basic rhyme,weak punch
i'm hear to teach you, so for today i'll use the board and chalk you up nice
only reason you'd make a tight cut, is if i brought a the knife
^^^weak ass punch
i'll twist these mic wires to a dna helix and show what you made of
you takin' rhymes, so how you gon' beat me with shit you didn't make up
^^got proof he bites?...fake personal...
cause i spit simplistic art, took away the beat when i ripped his heart
whent a capella and inflcited sparks so he'd light up when he's stripped apart
^^^IS there a punch involved in this?
cause i'll only way you'd rip the sheets is if you shred the paper
since thasarap! it's over, you rubbin blood staines on rhymes...like a red easer
^^No punch

You had a basic rhyme sheme.Use multis next time.As for your punches....you had none.A lot of your lines didn't seem to be a punch.And you had a line about how he spit shit he neva make up.Do you have a link that he bites?NO...so fake personal.
Overall-2/10

I don't care what you say, punk, you're nothin but talk
Yea you're soft, that's why you're named after ya cock*
^^Dope nameplay....but it didn't rhyme...
And if you think you can fuck with me, don't even try it
Cause your hair ain't red, but my punches can dye it
^^not a punch....weak
But if you got that itch, and you need-to-see-a-fight
I gon knock back "bitch", it ain't gon "bia-bia"-right**
^^horrible wordplay...bia-bia=be all?No.
You can't win or "t.i." me, so just "be easy", man***
When you rap, you "freeze" up like "Young Jeezy", man****
^^^OK...not all that
And if rap skills were money, you'd have only made a quarter
You even practive falling off, that's why you're a skateboarder
^^OK...but set-up was filler and played.

Work on your set ups.Your set-up must be relevant to the punch somehow.Your best and maybe only good line was the 1st punch.The 2nd bar was not a punch.And The 3rd bar was a horrible attempt at wordplay.

Vote-Thassarap(vote in link above)