I've said in the past I like your shit.. You got a style that can and will sell as long as you put your mind to it and make sure you promote ya image right and make yourself an interesting enough person to create hype around your raps that out-classes other rappers with your skill level. Cause although you have a nice style on the mic, there are a lot of rappers out there that are as good as you and on the same type of lyrics as you. Thats why its going to be harder for you to get past their level which is basically a large majority in the rap industry.

How you play your cards in business, marketing & promotion will be the decider and basically make you or break you. But even if your stuff doesent catch on to big time, youll always be able to hold a good respected place in the underground scene provided you stick with rap and be serious about it as a career choice. Lyrically your pretty well developed, I aint heard many lines from you that I would think are out of place or on some weird different shit.. You dont go overboard with the multi syllable rhyming or anything, but your delivery is something that doesent need all that to do the job.. You got a good recording voice.. But like I said, always plan your moves and keep elevating.. But your currantly at the level where you should be doing heavy promotion in your local area and starting up a fan base that you can fall back on while your planning your next stage of attack.

Keep it real..

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U fuckin skipped me homo.......

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...The real Renegade before Hova...

It was a child's story kind sort of. That was the reason I made it simple, thanks though.

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lol iunno, ia in't do many topicals yet. gotta start soon. So i guess jus this verse from this collab i'm doin' wit Trip and SenseR on Trade it all pt. 2 beat.

Now everytime I look at you, girl, I'm always mesmerized
From your breast to your thighs, yes, you got the best of eyes
You're always despised, by the other girls, why?
You're so fly, you could make a pimp guy to be shy
I can try to deny, but you gotta spell on me
I won't lie, yes, you're my, type of girl, come yell at me
It be my dream, see, if "I love you", you're tellin' me
Cuz the way you stole my heart, girl, it could be a felony
Now... girl, you kno that I'll always treat you right
For the rest of my life, I'd love to great you as my wife
Everynight, it's a fight, losin' you is far on mind
Cuz a gem like you, in this field, was hard to find
...In my eyes, you're my Queen, hope you kno that
No girl is on your level, or the one below that
You're a gift from above, you're the best see
Cuz everytime I look "atchuu"... god blessed me

props in advance for the time.

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First impression, you sound young on the mic. You can pull off your flow to an extent but so many rappers are on that skill level and above so it just doesent add anything origional or new to rap other than whats already out there. Lyrics were actually a decent story track on the top one that I'm listening to. But you need to up your game on hooks big time.. If your 19, you need to stop sounding like a 16 year old on tape.. Dont do those angry parts of your lyrics as much where you almost try to growl the words aswell, cause it dont sound that good with your voice.. Lyrically you seem to be able to hold your own but you arnt making anything spectacular and your flow isnt working to cover up your problems on the lyrical side either.. I am willing to bet you listen to a lot of eminem and some wutang.. Try to scrap your currant style of delivery a bit and change it to something that sounds more professional and less underground young internet rapper..

Also dont talk at the end of a track unless you got something really smart and profound to say, its a bad idea to say "a lot of people wont get this concept, its like I'm telling the story of this man, blah blah blah then it ends up being my story blah blah blah you may think I'm weird for writing this blah blah" That adds nothing lyrically or musically to your track and will make people go .........wtf.......

Also man.. You sometimes sort of have some lines that sound weird or wrong.. Like when you said "he got raped by inmates and prison guards too"... Which is just .....stupid since prison guards can go get pussy why would they want to rape a man.. Not to mention its a pretty gay thing to talk about on a track..

In closing, you got problems you need to address before you start trying to make any moves in rap as a career but your best to make it quick elevation if your already 19, being young dont last forever.

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RIP jono, peace out bboy.
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I told you I'd get bored of this pretty quick.. I'ma take a break and maybe do more later.. And fux, I refuse to critique lyrics bittin off that dumb kid's show..

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o heyall naw mafucka, i know u aint just gon stop tellin people bout they verses without doin mine

werd

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R.I.P. EAZY-E

*waits for nos to take a look at my effortless key*

Whenever you find time...

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there, thought id fix it up a bit fo u, no need 2 thank me, im always here 2 lent a helping hand

werd

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R.I.P. EAZY-E

Choir boy tellin the preacher how to preach.

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After watchin Jackie Gleason, walked into a precint
Gunned down a captain for no fuckin reason

Cisum Redrum.2oo5

Posted to get some constructive feedback, not for some bullshit from superficial low-life assholes.

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^kolby will kill your dog for that remark

$20 says I'll never get around to doing any more..

Maybe if I had nothing better to do... But unfortunatly... I do..

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RIP jono, peace out bboy.
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