.:AITZ:.

rollin wit a meat-clevers, never seen a colab come meaner
knockin on doors like street sweapers, hard attacks come deeper
u never seen krit split a lip, huntin after some green or a tv set
home envasions are like smokin that bong, after the first hit im on...
set wit my head hiddin,kickin a swet ill ride my bike til i acomplish the mission
watch as the pros do this, we kickin in doors and ready to take any hits
to save a lil gem bitch, a ring wit a diamond...suck this dick
comin through hell trick,ill hold this prick n take u through a mental instatute
rockin our own rules brokin photo frames and pool ques
stealin from fools, dumpin dead bodys in pools with iceicals
ill show u how we leave the joint wit no evedence n traces of finger prints
now we gonna brake into a place wit security screens n wirefencess fitted...


.:KRIT:.

alright pick up AITZ and we head strait-for-your-house
door opens dumb fuck gets hit twice in the face-n-the-mouth
im layin-him-out while AITZ creeps in the back-yard-armed-to-the-teeth
you started something you couldnt handle tryn to act-hard-when-your-a-part-of-the-weak
see now we do a run through with bats-n-chains
taking the money n drugs leaving you strapped-with-pain
AITZ meets me half way holdin a knife-to-a-hostage
i say "wheres the fukn money or your life-will-get-lost-bitch"
she points to the ceiling-im-like-go-in-attic-you-must be-fucking-dreaming
so i send AITZ 2 minutes later he comes out reveiling-provoking-the-panic-when-i-see-his-gut-is-bleeding
but its another mans blood he says "i sliced his life when i used the knife"
quickly find the cash n drive-this-ride-into-the-night....

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a pretty good work on metafpres and creativity
krit work on creativity vocab and multis

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krit isnt from this site willa....well he is but under a different name....


uppin this

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uppin..............................werd

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give me feed motherfuckers!!!!...........................werd uppin this

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i didnt know i had to drop 2 links...but here they are.

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2438021
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2438026

ok...uppin now.

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.:KRIT and AITZ i thought this was decent needs a little bit of elevation but i liked the medifored that Aitz used Example " home envasions are like smokin that bong, after the first hit im on..." Also the little bit of wordplay used " rollin wit a meat-clevers, never seen a colab come meaner
knockin on doors like street sweapers, hard attacks come deeper"....You just need to fix your structure keep spittin homie.............

Krit my favorite line was " AITZ meets me half way holdin a knife-to-a-hostage
i say "wheres the fukn money or your life-will-get-lost-bitch" that really had me laugh for a second... i can see your really trieng and you have potential... second favorite thing was but its another mans blood he says "i sliced his life when i used the knife"
quickly find the cash n drive-this-ride-into-the-night. <---Shows the abillity to story tell..... Keep droppin....

~TheSinnister~

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