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10-23-05, 11:47 PM
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Hell yeah
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Speats- Nobody Loves Me
IP: 8E02 1A6E
a small 8 bars, please leave feed, its not a true story but had to do one, some of it are true, some not, imma leave two links tomorow morning i promise please dont close this
Ive been beaten, spitted on, That was my life style
So i was hidding my tears behind my fake smile/ My dad was in the army, not there often and not 1 call The true story of my brother, he wasint there for me at all/ When he was, he had fun punching me with his friends I was hidding but he kept finding me and beating me again/ I thaught i was a punching bad, i had to quit school No friends,so i started to smoke, i thaught id look cool/ 5 months ago, i meant a girl and thaught i was perfect But she left me cuz she thaught that we didnt connect/ 2 weeks after she left me, she found someone new I have anger when she tells me: hes better than you/ The girl made fun of me, fuck her, damn i felt alone Imma shoot myself as soon i find the gun at home/ left feed on WhiteBoy http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2506664 left feed on JRoy but cant find the link lol Last edited by Speats : 10-24-05 at 04:53 PM. |
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10-24-05, 12:42 AM
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IP: 31C2 62EB
Drop two links or this will be closed
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10-24-05, 02:30 AM
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SEE YA AT THE TOP
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IP: 1EDC 673C
hey man..you trying to say something?
but this was cool..i aint get into it cuz like you said it aint about you.. on bar was off 5 months ago, i meant a girl and thaught i was perfect But she left me cuz she thaught that we didnt connect/ didnt flow to well for some reason {readin this to that 50 cent just a lil bit beat lol} but everything else was good
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10-24-05, 03:32 PM
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I'm Back HOEBAG
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IP: 12E7 3621
damn speats this is a pretty deep piece..aint too shabby....i'm feeling the context of the rhyme scheme and your flow was good the whole way through....you had decent vocab..seems like ur tryin too bring a life story of some sort nice shit..
overall 7/10
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10-24-05, 08:34 PM
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Hell yeah
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IP: F702 25BC
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10-24-05, 08:46 PM
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New to RV
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IP: E66C BFB2
Damn, Hard Times?? Well Its All Good Fam...Nice Free, Short But Sweet Caught My Attention
My dad was in the army, not there often and not 1 call The true story of my brother, he wasint there for me at all/ ^Fuccccccccked Up
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10-24-05, 10:25 PM
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Hell yeah
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IP: 2201 D3DE
thanks i guess man
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10-25-05, 01:05 AM
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L.E
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IP: DB16 D9CD
Damn...pretty deep...I can relate this shit to way back when...
Damn haven't left feed on an open mic for so long, I almost forget how... ALMOST. Structure was decent...some bars were stretched, but meh...lyrics are felt, flow is pretty good...vocab is decent as well. Overall, good shit, and start making songs again you hoe.  |
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10-25-05, 01:09 AM
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Light Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
I’m in tune with storms wearing uniforms like soldiers
Marching in parades watching blades ducking knives bolder Than Davy Crockett, gravy in my pocket looking over my shoulder Wear true leather together with denim jeans in them with seams Busted my theme trusted like the Girl Scout’s motto that beams Bright, try step strong but being slept on this site sucks bad These cats tell crab stories should be in laboratories glad To learn grammar grab a firm hammer and nail your sad Rhymes to walls yall mind stalls like low batteries in automobiles |
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10-25-05, 06:14 PM
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Hell yeah
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IP: BEF6 7DBF
get the fuck out of here you wack ass herb
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10-28-05, 11:54 AM
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Back....
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IP: A3FD 43A6
damn man this is dope. your line believe it or not are a little deeper than mine. I ain't tryna brag but you needa do better wording like I do. shit drop some more stuff like this. its friggin dope. loved this piece.
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10-31-05, 08:23 PM
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#12
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Hell yeah
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IP: 6457 1FC8
thanks alot macca
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