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Old 12-09-05, 07:03 PM   #1
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.:Warriors of God:.

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.:Third Crusade:.

What if I told you secretly, that for five years of straight fued
...Two tactical minds would collide in holy hate & revenue...
"It's only fate!" proclaimed the pope Urban the Second
The Holy War at its most virulent point in attempts to be effective
Correct it, The Holy Land was a fiercely contested battlefield neglected
Shielded soldiers weilded religion as reason's to slaughter
Fought over by Muslim and Christian armies, zealots and assassins.
Ever active in attackin' in the name of god's will & passion.
...Savage 'morbid' lynguistics, from putrid infidels to simplistics...
But get this: two renowned figures errupted from the 'sickness'
...Richard the Lionheart, then King of England, versus Content...
The European cursed Sultan Saladin. Savior of Alah's profits.
Contenued conflict, as Creators names portrayed an' held High
As the Warriors of God collide an' explode in the night's sky
It's lifes cry... An excuse to conquer the proper and slaughter
As Son's and Daughters prosper from the gift the Angel of Death offer's.

.:Richard the Lionheart:.

I was born on September 8, 1157, & was enthroned in 1172.
King to few, for kingdoms are run from poverty to including fueds.
I spent a few, years... in twining my mind in proper sanction
Until I felt the urge to splurge and collide with the Muslim Nation
Subtle & Patient. I tried to fight for whats right, coincide with my God
But alas. I guess my God's a fraud because we lost it to Alah's stance.
I crawled intranced, with my lance on point and justly in order
Up until Saladin strode his army up to the Husky Holy Border
Now I'm Older. I think back to the Third Crusade's parade of Shambles.
I understand the gambles placed by the Christian race in despising haste
It's "describing fate". Yah, suprising state we were in b/c of the Irate.
I taste my soul, & watch it falter and alter at the altar & in roll...
For when I died April 6, 1199, from a wound in the Limousin.
I realized the forsaken choice in the poise of the pope's engrossed poison.

.:Saladin:.

I was born in 1137 a scholar, and died, March 4, 1193 a Muslim Hero.
It was never my intentions to be resurrected from zero's standing.
To commanding demanding folks to Jerusalem's unspoken ranting
Panting, as I counter the thunder from the 'powder' cowards
...Louder, as the vibrant encounters eclipse religions poison shower...
Poised to cower, during the First Crusades grasp of the city...
...Doomed to loom in utter control as we stroll in self pity...
It's shitty... but in the end my men fought & won the city's hold
We were bold enough to hold the corrupted assassins death toll
Wept for the soul, it's what I did in the end, & whitnessed canty
Scripted sanity & so the Muslim Nation still holds it in strict tenacity.


This is a glimpse on the outlook of each legendary leader, Richard and Saladin during the Third Crusade.
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Old 12-10-05, 03:33 PM   #2
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yoooo
this was a nasty drop
i did one on a very similar topical before, ima post it
but pertainin to your drop
structure and topic choice was dope...
and the flow held its own

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King to few, for kingdoms are run from poverty to including fueds.
I spent a few, years... in twining my mind in proper sanction
Until I felt the urge to splurge and collide with the Muslim Nation
Subtle & Patient. I tried to fight for whats right, coincide with my God
^sick....nice relation to history and narration held key...
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Old 12-10-05, 08:43 PM   #3
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Thanks for the feed bro, leave a link or two an' 'll hit it up.
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Old 12-10-05, 08:51 PM   #4
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I will stick to what i say, this shows your CS's best head...

Flow was consistant and solid, you stuck to the concept well throughout, vocab was advanced throughout.]

I also like the advanced rhyming scheme, not one sylable shit on every line.

Hit up link in my sig please.

Richard and lionheart sect was my favorite, that was top, ill rhyming and the concept was completely pulled off..
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Old 12-10-05, 09:15 PM   #5
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Got you after I get back from the movies with my wife bro, thanks for the feed.
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Old 12-10-05, 11:53 PM   #6
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This was a historical piece.

Literally lol

You stuck on topic the whole way which was impressive.

You had good imagery and kept to the concept well.
I love how you used enhanced vocab but not to much so the flow was choppy.

Nice emotion and facts for this topic. Deff one to remember man
overall 8/10 keep ya shit up.

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Old 12-11-05, 11:46 AM   #7
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Wow...nice drop didnt expect it but it was a nice ass drop...

Had a good concept stick to it and all...Vocab was good n all...

You also had good Imagrey ...And also had a decent flow...

But overall- 8.5/10 ...Nice ass drop ...Keep it up ...
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Old 12-12-05, 12:25 AM   #8
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damn history class wut u'd think of our lesson?...lmmao shit was a hot drop man all the way through good vocab,nice flow i was definetly imagining this shit while reading nice concept keep up yo shit n keep postin peace
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Old 12-12-05, 03:44 PM   #9
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ha dope drop man

the structure on all was good

drop was pretty good had me readin and readin iw as into the lyriks

into the flow man i lked thie piece prety good im feeling this piece ~1~
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Old 12-20-05, 12:51 AM   #10
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Uppin' for abit more feed.
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Old 12-20-05, 05:35 AM   #11
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dayum good shit here....liked it.....

you stuck with high vocab and consistency in lines
sometimes u sacrificed flow a lil' but it was still good due 2 tha
content...

Saladin waz my fav....Lots of rhyming words,, almost multis in it
and it flowed with perfection
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Old 12-23-05, 08:03 AM   #12
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uppin for some more feed, appreciate it.

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Old 12-30-05, 12:47 AM   #13
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Uppin' one last time, appreciate the feed thus far.

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