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04-12-06, 02:35 AM
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I don't lose
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Don't Wunna Be Right...its so fuckin real
IP: 9C2B 06EC
word a track about how i feel about life and the fuck world telling me what to do
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3780008 word get at me links - http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2717150 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=226196
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 well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything so i took my old man's advice three sad semesters it was only fifteen grand spent in bed i thought about the army i dropped out and joined a band instead  |
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04-12-06, 02:59 AM
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On The Air - COMIN JAN 07
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IP: BACC 8E92
i'm checkin this out right now
the beat is pretty hot the flow is really nice....you sound like em a lil bit....your lyrics are pretty nice... this is a nice lil joint patna lol keep it up |
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04-12-06, 03:54 AM
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I have a lot to learn...
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IP: 0B90 96F9
Man shits ill. Im diggin ya lyrics, delivery, flow... all that shit.
Theres room for improvement though, but I feel as though if I tell you what to do it wont do shit. Just keep practicing and you'll keep improving.
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04-12-06, 09:32 AM
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ILL GRAMMATIX... any other questions?
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IP: FEAC 2479
aiight jay...
the content is on point ... but ya flow is a tad off a lil bit... every now and then it seems like ya forcing some werds to fit in a line... i'm loving the beat, man... the emotion is kool... ya outro quality is actually better than ya verse's...lol ... ya verse vocals were a lil low but i could still make out what you were saying... smooth lil ditty right here... make a nuk nuk wanna stop and think about the things around him... werd... tracks like that got power, man...werd... keep pumping them messages out there... and have fun with this hip-hop shyt cuz there's gon be times when ya get tired of it... but never stop da hip-hop!!!! good shyt overall
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 CLICK DA SIGGY  "real recognize real but still others remain jaded believing bullshit accounts of how "so-and-so" made it there's a formula for gimmick emcees that are over-rated: wackness created... payola paid it... and radio overplayed it" |
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04-12-06, 09:40 AM
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I don't lose
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IP: 9C2B 06EC
word i.g. tell me where it sounds forced n shit
cuz this is a track suposed to go on my album....this is first cut, i like to do three or more....so yea help me edit this shit right
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything so i took my old man's advice three sad semesters it was only fifteen grand spent in bed i thought about the army i dropped out and joined a band instead |
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04-12-06, 10:10 AM
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ILL GRAMMATIX... any other questions?
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IP: FEAC 2479
aiight man... lemme listen again and i'll get back at you with that... don't get me wrong... it's a kool track... but it's da lil things that ya don't catch sometines...werd...i'll holla in the forum when i get a chance
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CLICK DA SIGGY "real recognize real but still others remain jaded believing bullshit accounts of how "so-and-so" made it there's a formula for gimmick emcees that are over-rated: wackness created... payola paid it... and radio overplayed it" |
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04-12-06, 12:10 PM
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I don't lose
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IP: 9C2B 06EC
yea i know...cuz when you write it you have a diff view then other people....thats why im tryin to see what yall pick up on n fix it
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything so i took my old man's advice three sad semesters it was only fifteen grand spent in bed i thought about the army i dropped out and joined a band instead |
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04-12-06, 02:26 PM
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OYD
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IP: 64CA 6C26
What's hot:
beat is pretty coo...I like the melody flow isn't bad Lyrics are personal = good What's not: You need to up your presence...you sounded set far back in the beat...up your dubs...that'll fix some of that Delivery could be more dynamic, not terrible though Overall: Hook was too complicated...sounded like a verse...IMO, hooks should be repetitive, almost chant like to "hook" the listener Good drop tho otherwise 1 |
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