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Old 05-28-06, 08:42 PM   #1
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step after step
strolling through familiar streets
ones i would adventure
when i was just up to your knees
A nice sunny day
Clear skies, soft breeze
One of those days
that you live in a fantasy
A smile on my mouth, and glimmer in my eye
When friends would hang out,
with nothing to do time after time
But nothing was everything
Because it was never really nothing
Everyday was the same thing
And everyday was fun
Where the park was the place
and bikes were a must
Not caring about the dirt on your face
and feeling cool when you cuss
riding trails your parents banned you from
climbing rocks, trees, then falling from'em
no peer pressure
no feeling to fit in
because everyone was one
and everyone was in
and thinking and comparing
about then and now
It sets the sun
And darkens the clouds
Because the library steps
Where we would shout
Are dirty and wrecked
And drugs are handed out
Which are paid for and used
By souls I once knew
Minds beaten, abused
And futures are skewed
A smile I use to laugh with
When times were the best
Are emotionless cysts
Just a giant drunken mess
Intoxicated by
Sin, Lies, Gossip and Greed
Lust, Addiction
and what they think they need





there is a second part.
ill post it later.
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Old 05-29-06, 01:52 AM   #2
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Ok here goes my first post lol....I liked this a lot, the beginning did not grab my attention and I overcame my severe ADD and continued to read. In doing this, I found a very decent descriptive piece. I did not expect the poem to become what it became and that is what I enjoyed most about it. I hate when I start a poem and can almost finish it myself because it is so damn cliche.

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Where the park was the place
and bikes were a must
Not caring about the dirt on your face
and feeling cool when you cuss
riding trails your parents banned you from
climbing rocks, trees, then falling from'em
no peer pressure
no feeling to fit in
because everyone was one
and everyone was in




Well keep it up and look out for my stuff, I'll be posting tonight or tomorrow.

-Krissy
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