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Old 03-06-03, 10:27 PM   #1
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alone in a corner (a homless perspective)

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alone in a corner
i peer through a window
shiny glass pane
hey baby i see you
take off your clothes
while i shank my wank
dont call the cops
or my mind will go blank
im homeless you know
i never get off
so please please show
your tits and some more
i sniffed a can of paint
before i found this new sight
your titties are huge
itlll be a good night
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Old 03-07-03, 09:40 AM   #2
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was this song about a hooker cuse if it was whats with the sniffin???
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Old 03-07-03, 09:42 AM   #3
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hmmmmmm, I guess......do your thing.


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Old 03-07-03, 04:07 PM   #4
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its about a homeless man peeping tom
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Old 03-08-03, 01:57 PM   #5
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yo stop posten these rideculous so called poems ur maken the section look bad u had some good poems but this is just retarded id say if ur writen bout a homeless peepin tom u might have some issues bt w/e holla bak 1
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Old 03-09-03, 04:45 PM   #6
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WHATEVER.. THIS SHIT IS GOLD
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Old 03-09-03, 05:22 PM   #7
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shit is gold ight.......fake gold.......peeping tom .....HA made me laugh
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Old 03-09-03, 09:06 PM   #8
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thank you... gold, fake gold?.. either way its shiny
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Old 03-10-03, 06:17 PM   #9
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Heh, made me laught...but also has serious points to it too...

...to say this aint poetry is ignorant...it's about a homeless man who, to stay sane, gets pleasures out of sniffing anything 'stimulating' he can find, which is a paint can..


..being homeless, he aint had some in a while...so out of desperation, and possible loss of mind (even if only a bit, or only for a littlw while) peeps into a window looking for a cheap thrill...

...i dunno what state of mind he wrote it in....dunno if he was taking the piss...or putting forward serius points using some sort of comedy form (satire i think..)....but it was a good piece...

...even though i felt he could've done more with it....at times seemed to be a bit too elaborate....

..respect...
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Old 03-13-03, 12:48 PM   #10
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I liked the poem it had substance in it's own little way
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