Surviving in the streets everyday was my only mission/
Trying not to become another dead victim in hell's kitchen/
Always hanging with somebody who is known for snitching/
My mother bitching about why I wasn't born a christian/
Cutting class so I can get a girl who wanted to penetrate/
Every nigga in school was treating me like a renegade/
The principal was wathcing me like a enemy of the state/
Eyes was full of jealousy and envy when he looked me in the face/
Playing basketball everyday after I was drinking on some liquor/
Go to the body with a nigga,bang him out so his lips can quiver/
Fought other crews,stomped them out until their spine shiver/
Had them throwing up blood when my fist was in their liver/
Smoking weed everyday like it was daily ritutal/
Don't go to chruch on sunday,so that means i'm not that spirtutal/
When my mother delivered me people said it was a miracle/
Now everywhere I go i'm causing more danger than myistkal/

Uppin for repplies.

Bad topic to do but every1 starts off rapping about this for starters, sex weed n runnin from cops, least u didnt have a nine in yer pants

"Fighting almost everyday until I became very spritutal/
Now all the girls thinking me and homies gets very physical/" -"very" - need to work on the vocab, vocab's what makes a peice.

"I never falled in love" - falled? Check ur grammar. "fell"

"My main doggs are taken out of this earth,now I was feeling hurt/
Their spirits is my only gift,and my anger will be my only curse/" I think u switched tenses (past to present back to past)aswell, "are" then "was".

Keep writtin tho, elevate.

I changed the verse a jay.Uppin for repplies.

Uppin for repplies.

not bad but that Gangsta Shoot Um Up Die Slow Shit... is played man... your structure wasnt bad but you should try going with a more complicated rhyme pattern and lace is with more multi's

and dont just UP your shit.... Reply on other drops too!!

Thankz rich NI,but I didn't mention shooting somebody on this
piece dogg.Uppin for repplies.