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03-16-03, 10:46 PM
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Help me out I'm new
IP: 8283 C588
With more money than your savings and loan
Stay off the throne You don't wanna sit in the hot seat I leave you laid out like reinforced concrete Better yet I'll walk all over you This ain't a real rhyme this just something that I'm working through Got you cats throwing it up like a stomach flu |
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03-16-03, 10:50 PM
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IP: 5715 663C
^^^first off, if u need help, post a REAL rhyme, anyone could of wrote that, its simple and short....write about a Topic, or sumthing so u could really be Critiqued
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03-16-03, 11:29 PM
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IP: 8283 C588
tru
thanks |
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03-17-03, 02:03 AM
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yeah must agree there... at least post maybe 1 long or 2 shot verses... dont like write a whole song or nothing... and write it on a topic... but from reading that up there... it rhymes but its overly simple... i mean this reply is almost longer than it... keep rhymin
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03-17-03, 02:34 AM
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yeah nice start, true to wat every1 else is sayin, u gota write on a topic n you'll get more replies on praise, critism, advice on ur rhymes, some good lines, just elevate more with vocab, flow was aight.. keep spittin..
peace out... |
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