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First impression~
IP: 83BD DE24
I see you. my mind is racing, sorting through thousands of words i have committed to memory, yearning to find the appropriate and perfect ones for this occasion.
Quicker than possible, i discard them one by one, realizing none capture the intensity of all i want to say- until finally I'm probing through nothing. That same nothing is the empty air that turns into the lump in my throat as I try and swallow my failure. inhibiting me from speaking, i am forced to just watch, arms folded across my upper body, stopping my heart from jumping through my chest. It's a volcanic eruption of emotion searing through my skin, burning to escape--only to take form as a smile. But a powerful smile. an intriguingly intense smile. I hope. I cant stand still. My hips sway side to side as if they hear a song my ears ignore. You're getting closer, and i want to just kiss you, and squeeze you until you think of nothing else but me. but- I settle with a nod of acknowledgement instead. cuz i GOT to be suave. Now, you're about 10 feet in front of me---10 feet too far. In case you've come to take my hand and sweep me off my feet, i inconspicuosly brush my palms against the fabric of my shirt, to rid myself from all evidence of nervousness. cuz i GOT to be suave I know you can't hear my thoughts, but i think as if you can. i wish you could. You're so close i can taste your scent lingering on my taste buds, and i gladly soak it up. I bite my lower lip anxiously, goin through a mental checklist- how do i look? are my clothes straight? no stray hairs?? check. Is my breath fresh, and lips succulent? check. do i smell good, is this pose sexy enough? check. am i STILL suave?? maybe....damn... All this before hello. this is real to me, i dont know bout yall... |
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~OrIgINaL eXeCuToNeR~
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
for some reason i felt there was suposed to be a rhyme scheme up in there...if there was...it was terrible
![]() holla one...hunnet
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freelance RN Vs RB WAR!!....yr 2000...vet~~YEA I SAID VET!! WHAT YOU WANT ME TO PROVE IT? STEP THEN YOU FUCKING HOMO'S |
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IP: 4452 FB45
lol sum bits in der got me chukklin, nice piece but ur ryhme scheme woz a bit out. i could feel wot u wer sayin
peace ~roX~
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im capable of anything my amagination can give me wings, like doves flyin over streets watching many things//Nas |
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IP: BFE5 28C7
Aye, this was nice once you got into it....
...but then the lack of structure and disrupting flow put together made it kind of akward, and less like poetry.. ...still, i felt once i got into it, it was nice....the concept and the personal depth it had to it, imagery n some of the vocab used.... ...enough said, resepct.. |
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IP: D2D1 DCE3
I feel what yall are sayin, but i think it flows when its read right, i guess its jus the perception. But thanks
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Special Ghost To Blow
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IP: 4577 CD9A
listen to sage francis...its like your speakin but
sayin your thoughs instead of searchin for words to rhyme and only rhyming when i coumes in place while still sequentially describing the events outside the box......no bad ~Content~ |
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IP: 7C64 D663
sage francias huh....aight thanks man
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