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Old 04-07-03, 10:12 PM   #1
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hmmm...I'm not finished this one yet, but I was just wondering how ya'll think it's going...I'm in the middle of the second verse right now...oh, and does any one know where I can find beats to use with my songs??? Just wonderin', tell me what you think and know. peaz.

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Back in eighty-six my birth mom left "me" "be"\\
Abandonned since birth, I became government "property"//
Many people felt sorry cause I was all alone you "see"\\
No father or mother, it was just "me"//
Now I look back on the crazy thought, it's "disgusting"\\
I couldn't picture doing that to no one, not in my wildest "dreams"//
Spent my first christmas in foster care, all "alone"\\
I had to wait six weeks till I had a "home"//
In a "hell hole", but I didn't know any "better"\\
Too young to even fell the rain and stormy "weather"//
If my biological parents don't want me, "then-who-does?"\\
My ma's busy drinking she's probably on the "bend-and-buzzed"//
Skipping school just like she skipped out on her "kid"\\
If I ever met her I'd question how she had the will to "live"//
A "life" of "lies", "hiding" the truth behind fifteen year old "eyes"\\
No matter how hard I "try" I can't imagine without beginning to "cry"//
I'm unwanted, not "needed", one day I'll haunt them, I mean "it"\\
She could not have "forseen it", soon I'll make her "bleed", "bitch"//
She'll regret her actions and I'll find that I was a "mistake"\\
I was at the wrong place at the wrong time, but now it's too "late"//

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Abandoned
No place to run no place to hide
Branded
A mistake, even if you try
Landed
A home of hiding feelings deep
Stranded
With nothing left that's worth to keep

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Did I inherit her eyes or maybe her just part of her "personality"//
Giving me up, I don't understand but I wish I knew the "hurt", to "see"//
How hard and painful the experience payed toll on her "life"//
To be fifteen years old with a baby, in school, how do you do "right"?//
What choice do you make when there's only a few "options"//
Give it up or abortion, she made the right choice with "adoption"//
But here I am now with no clue as to who she is and "why"//
So I sit here for hours just wondering, fuck it, I shouldn't even "try"//
All I know is she left me there in the hospital that night by "myself"//
Doing that to a 'baby', she mustv'e been 'crazy', she needs "help"//
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Old 04-08-03, 12:19 AM   #2
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man nice spit! i liked your topic and the way you rhyme and flow,sounds nice...keep wrting this out foreal,will be a tight song..i aint sure about the beats though sorry,peep my song in open mic some time...holla back...nice verses foreal,i felt the hook nicely...
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Old 04-08-03, 12:46 AM   #3
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Hum... I'm impressed... nice drop... Keep it up...
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Old 04-08-03, 02:47 PM   #4
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thanx for your two cents. I've been workin' on it for awhile, then I got a writers block and couldn't write a thing...but I picked it up again the other day and kept going. I can't wait to finish it. peaz.
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Old 04-09-03, 01:11 PM   #5
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uppin' for thoughts. peaz.
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Old 04-09-03, 09:30 PM   #6
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hey was up... hey I was feeling what you saying here... it's a deep concept and a pretty good one for a song... I don't really understand why you added those " " for, but... thas nothing...
Hey the flow in this was pretty decent, could of been better, you had pretty good rhymes... it all fit well with the concept... yeah, pretty good...

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Old 04-10-03, 12:21 PM   #7
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Thanx for the comments and suggestions......peaz...
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Old 04-13-03, 03:30 PM   #8
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YO IM FEELIN THAT SHIT! .........LOVIN THA TITLE,I KNO THA FEELIN MANS!.............N I LOVE THA HOOK,THAS A WIKKED MANS TUNE.MUCH LOVE BLITZ!
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Old 04-15-03, 12:12 PM   #9
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thanx blitz. Glad to know that it's an ok drop. peaz.
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