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04-21-03, 04:32 AM
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I promise
IP: ABE5 5A5C
i wrote this for my girl fon our one year, i need some feedback before it comes up so i be sure it is any good. So any criticism would be great thanks.
I PROMISE i promise you my love i promise you my heart i promise you my life i promise we'll never be apart i promise not to hurt you i promise to never make you cry i promise to always trust you i promise not to lie i promise you forever i promise you tonight i promise you my respect i promise to do things right i promise to always be there i promise until the end i promise to always love you i promise to be your best friend i promise you my love i promise you my life i promise you forever i promise our love is my life |
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04-21-03, 12:14 PM
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IP: CEF5 716F
come on i need some feedback here people
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04-21-03, 01:01 PM
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IP: 0420 E190
Hahahah comedy...with saddam n bush..hahaha
Nice i didnt know you did poems...i felt the emotions in this piece nice drop dawg And nice battle vs Mountain unfortunatly he wont be joinin us...lol
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04-21-03, 09:02 PM
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IP: CEF5 716F
unfotunatly? i never wanted that kid to join
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04-21-03, 10:52 PM
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IP: C735 A6DB
this not that bad...but if you gonna recite this out loud to your chick, then you might wanna spice it up a lil...it lacked sum floe...
but the point was put across...so this was a nice poem... she'll feel it... |
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