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Old 05-09-03, 06:45 PM   #1
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Unhappy Poem shit

IP: C448 F41C

You always criticize me like I'm no different from you
pointing out faults that damage my heart
taring it apart, leaving marks and braking it into parts
that turns my whole world around
making my expression of happiness drown
in a pool of poison, that covers my head
the emotion speads through my body like cancer
asking questions of concern, in return are evasive answers

you don't know what its like in my shoes
so you accuse my affection toward you
and refuse to listen, to my pain
walking on with happy thoughts in your brain
leaving me in a cloud of rain, half-insane
not knowing if life if worth living for another day
so i walk away, and swallow the depression
maybe one day you'll see and learn a lesson
for your treatment towards me
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Old 05-09-03, 10:23 PM   #2
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HOOOOOOOOOOO nice one man. Really felt ya emotions on this. Mediocre vocab and an ok flow. Hope ta see ya do some more.

plz return the favor if ya can and comment on either "My theory on life" of "The life of a child"thx peace out
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