check it yo this is one verse from a song i writn wit Shemy(Whiterap19) tell me what you think

Song Cry2
Listen....all the things i done but th best thing i don was hae u as my numba one//
How the fuck im leave you out in the blue//
you was my main squeez i ws nothin with out you

I memba te day we used ta play//
listen ta CD n mak love ta Marvin Gaye
Like the way you moved ya hip in that special way//
you would drop like its hott like we a son soul train

You call m up real fast.. any time or place//
and i' drop everything juss ta see ya face
the lovn was great//i had ta fuck it up it the end of a lovly day

damn what i do now its my fault//you was my foundation i broke it apart//
i fee like a bum wit a benz as a shoppn cart//
not even GODS hands could mend ya broken heart

Hook: repeat 3X
I cant see em come in down my eyes but i gotta make this song
cry
( R-Jay is All in it)
(Shemy is All in it)
(BDP is allin it)

Black Diamond productions
Shemy - R-Jay

Yeh Not Bad At All Man,Work a Lil On Ya Vocab Tho... But Not a Bad Topic...

Peace.. Spitzophrenic

yo hit thisup tell me ho ya feel bout it if you have the instumental ta song cry put it on and readthis shit aight.......

yo tell me how yall feel on this aight .................................................. ............................

nice lil song homie,like the kid above said,not too complex lyricaly but who cares shit sound nice n flows.do ur thing.1

yo thanks man juss tryna a get y shit out keep hittn it up aight yo his song gonna be tight dont worry you know me

yo keep hittn this song up an i needmore replys an opinons on tis song aight keep hittn it up......holla at cha boy

this was an aight drop. def. needs work, but still good. return the favor and check my 2 pieces out if ya want, they called Not the average and lyrical slice and dice

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Only God can judge me, Who THE FUCK IS YOU?!

yo keep hittn this up aight ill return thefavor aight holla at cha boy
its the roc in here.....................1

This drop was Aight dawg........Could have been better though.....Just elevate a lil mo.......U gon get better..........Return da favour , checkout my boy redragon's drop http://63.219.149.14/forum/showthre...&threadid=52130