aight now i got ur attention

And there you were

lookin for somethin to call my own

And there you were

my heart sayin sure, my brain sayin dont

And there you were

morals pressed like luck in my eyes

There you are

the lies i help you put to demise

There we are

stuck with borders of glass between us

Im sorry

Runnin in my mind there is always a "but.."

I've lied

Ive lied to you, to every one you know

Im sorry

I have no retreat, theres no where to go

I .. I ... Lu-Lu-Lu..fuck it

I dont know if you feel this way too

I ... I ... Lu.. GOD DAMMIT

In my mind i hope and tell my self you do

I... .I ...I..cant commit..

But I do love you........

That was a tight drop

Concept was madd sick, content was great
Wordplay was ill

I personally like the last bit the best

8.5/10

Nice drop

-OnE LoVe-

thanx dog.. im peepin urs as we speek

all i can say is..damn WOW!.....lots of emotions there..

its funny cuz a lot of guys i know are not as emotional as i expected....but fuck...not only u got talent...but u have passion....

wish i have one of those...even just one ya know...but i aint that lucky....

nice piece...i really liked it

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lol

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Nice job on writing this. I liked the style of it. I haven't seen one like this before..

The content was really good. And the way you wrote it was good too..like with the bold letters.

"I .. I ... Lu-Lu-Lu..fuck it

I dont know if you feel this way too

I ... I ... Lu.. GOD DAMMIT

In my mind i hope and tell my self you do

I... .I ...I..cant commit..

But I do love you........"

I thought that was the best part. I laughed when I read it cause I did nearly the same thing and felt like an idiot not being able to get the words out. Good piece..

lol, thats str8 dog, i just keyed this up..

i dont ever put mind on poems









just heart, and this was from my heart