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Old 06-12-03, 05:16 PM   #1
THE DOPED MALB
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I will always be alone

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I understand I will always be alone/
Therefore my futures predictable not unknown/
Because about 24hours ago I did realise/
That im a ugly fucking fat twat so my demise/
Could only improve the world I know it wont compromise/
Anybody’s jubilation shown so my inevitable elimination/
Might just see to depressions termination/
But will its fucked up determination/
Haunt me during my next shitty life/
Will I once again be forced to sacrifice/
My health just so I can actually once be myself/
But depression has only arrived because I have no wealth/
Shit I cant even afford to pay my rent/
I might aswell surround my feet in a block of cement/
And proceed to drowned in the sea/
So I can then venture forth and go to the holey/
Place in the sky but actually I bet when I die/
I will see my soul disappear then my biggest fear/
Will come true as it goes straight to HELL
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Old 06-12-03, 05:26 PM   #2
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hmmm...concept was kinda typical as it may sound but it definitely showed perspectives of what ur trying to say...

the flow is a bit off..vocabs are weak at some points...but hey in poems u just gotta do what u want ..hehe

this is the first one ove read from u...hope u to drop more
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Old 06-13-03, 03:31 PM   #3
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Hey Malb, long time no see.

Great poem, strong feelings in it. You've written better before, but this is still great.

~Shalom~
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