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IP: C779 902B
This will explain my feelings right now....Vocab is a little low....But check it...
-Intro- Right now been in this relationshit fo bout a year, I love her truely and her leavin is the only thing i fear, I cant lose her, I gotta ha ve her near, My head is full of voices, shes the only one i hear// -Welcome To the Hell of Heaven- My past is something i try to forget// I was depressed, A rebel, everything you said i would neglect// But all that i regret, This girl brought life to my soul// It was like my fire was dying, but she kept it going wit her coal// And she has so much more, Shes everything i believe in// Shes like my god, not loving her is like a-deadly-sin// Now listen in, Im releasing my trusest feelings and thoughts// This girl is priceless, No ho thats bought// I loved her from the start, I saw her and our hearts collided// She brought me back to life, after all these years that i couldnt find it// Now feel it, After the emotion its bout 15 months in// I know what we have is true, and i'm not front-in// What we have is somethin, but right now my emotions are starting to slide// We've had every up and down, I just wanan end the fucking ride//(fighting) I look in her eyes, i know its true, but shes feelin for another heart// I feel like everything said was fuckin cheaper than wal-mart// She tore me apart, i wanted it bad, i wated it to last// Now, im back and i'm only rembered as-her-past// I love her..... |
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IP: C779 902B
Can i have replies on this please.....????.....
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IP: C779 902B
up
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BANNED For Being An Idiot
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IP: 703B EF0C
arnt u a woman?
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IP: C779 902B
yea
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IP: C22E FA17
some good metaphors used and some ok vocab, maybe u could write more, good solid piece tho Eborted rating- 7/10
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