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Old 06-26-03, 02:43 AM   #1
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Panama - Stuck on a Bitch (Freestyle)

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From the first time i met u,I knew that u was speaical
Lips was Sexual,
but my pimp game,
had no effect on you
brothers had stepd on,
moms just slept on you
matter a fact didnt think,
i couldve of have slept with u
a perfect dime pieace,
remind me of times we
hot mommy, with a body all up on me
we sipped armi ,
lam-ped up in shade
so much affection,
it was almost clache
the kind of loven we made
yo was my Down-Ass wit a Round-Ass
get a pound of that best grass,
hopped in the S-Class, Mommy u da best at
givin head that
make my toes curls
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Old 06-26-03, 03:08 AM   #2
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This Was Only Ok..Vocab Wasn't All Too Good Nor Was The Flow..You Changed The Rhyme Scheme Numerous Times...My Tips To You...Use More Complexity And Elevate..
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Old 06-26-03, 10:59 AM   #3
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^^all that need to be said^^

with those length of bars you'd eithe rneed to rap really fast or really slow....so extended them a bit!
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Old 06-26-03, 11:33 PM   #4
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Hey Guys thanks for the advice it means alot
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Old 06-26-03, 11:35 PM   #5
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Lips was Sexual,
but my pimp game,

^^^Lmao , Man u need elevate dawg , Ur rhymes are simple , U need too up ur Vocab.... Are u a male or Female
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