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i was just thinking about a girl i know a few days ago, the "temperature rising" tune was stuck in my head so i wrote something to it. pretty much how i was feeling shortly after she came to visit one weekend.
you know i could never put a miss in your place/ i remember the first time you put a kiss on my face/ the first time the lights went low and....well, you know/ the afterglow, the wide smiles after estasty throes/ the kind of girl who was a friend first, through best and worst/ who'd seen me at my darkest, feelings left can burst/ we were destined, like this was pre-ordaned in the stars/ and now i'm trying to get my feelings explained in these bars/ ever since i laid eyes on you, knew you were special/ getting to know you gave my whle life a kind of refreshal/ even at a distance, we communicate clearly/ even in silence, you look into my eyes and hear me/ this makes sense like a flawless theory, telling my friends/ they calling me pussywhipped, but i'm yelling at them/ this is it, from now until death do us part/ and i'm feeling your love with every single breath to my heart/ corny i know, but its not often i write a seriously upbeat verse. |
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Ummmmm
mixed feelings......... I think it was an alright drop............ it was good for what you said it was.......but nothing stood out at me......... still a good drop though, keep doing your thing.......... |
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That was *alright* It was good but too plain.
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This was not Bad!! Well at least I can say it wasnt one of those shitty ass other open mics I read today!!
But up the content, add some better flow & you`ll have a nice peice .. good concept though pz 1!
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I thought it was nice... not thrilling... but nice...
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