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Old 07-14-03, 12:12 PM   #1
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peep this...leave some replies please

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daddy why did you do that to mommy/
you said if we hit somebody we're supposed to say sorry/
but you never say sorry daddy, you yell now/
why did ou tell that man that mommy just fell down?/
mommy didn't fall down, daddy's lying/
mommy why are you always sad and always crying/
daddy why are you always mad you always fighting/
why do you always say I'm bad even when I'm trying/
No I don't want to go to my room/
I don't want to go to bed now, I want to be with you/
I don't want to, daddy it's too early/
I didnt' mean it daddy I'm sorry, I'm sorry/
I promise I"ll never ever say that again/
I'm sorry daddy please don't hit me again/
please, I'll be a good boy now/
don't put me in the room, please don't turn the lights out/
...what did I do?/
I'm sorry daddy that's all I want to say to you/
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Old 07-14-03, 01:23 PM   #2
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damn....so much depth captured with such little effort...the "daddy" "mommy" thing really made the piece more powerful..making it seem like its really coming from the mind of a young child witnessing all this and not knowing wat to make of it.....definately liked this....
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Old 07-14-03, 06:16 PM   #3
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ayo, thanks for the love....anyone else feeln this or what? if you ain't, let me know...peace
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Old 07-15-03, 12:20 PM   #4
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wow this touched me... nice written
the mommy and daddy really spoke to me too... it made the poem just a lil more powerful
nice one
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