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Old 07-17-03, 09:02 PM   #1
LaDy TrInItY
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Corruption

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One world leadin deception but they just too scared of rejection.//
Contraceptive must be a thing of tha pst or just a mis-conception.//
Detction of girls concievin babies and droppin pills to reflect them.//
Down tha toilet with out a chance to even get a tear shed.//
Ya blood red through tha veins but its enough said.//
Just rememba next time you lay down use protection.//

Corruption of tha world yet you claim its in tha past.//
You forgot history repeats itself cuz common sense is what you lack.// (repeat)

Now its time to shed light upon all them "g's.//
Poppin caps from car windows then gettin ready to flee.//
But you too big to get on ya knees when you need.//
God to help you, now is that how we real men be.//

Corruption of tha world yet you claim its in tha past.//
You forgot history repeats itself cuz common sense is what you lack.// (repeat)
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Old 07-17-03, 09:03 PM   #2
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its a work in progress..just wanted to get feed back for this much
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Old 07-17-03, 10:01 PM   #3
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That was legit. I liked this better than everything else I've read in here so far.
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Old 07-17-03, 11:45 PM   #4
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hey baby...i like it it's real good and all true too. good work =) love ya
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Old 07-17-03, 11:45 PM   #5
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its nice a little short but still good.
keep it up nice rhyming.
4.0/5.0
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Old 07-18-03, 10:24 AM   #6
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thanx
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Old 07-18-03, 10:39 AM   #7
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yea, had a nice flow... could use some metaphores.. or some foreshadowing.. of some kind, but I like the message it sends for sure.. stray'n people off the "thug life".. keep it up
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Old 07-18-03, 05:07 PM   #8
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thanx kid..i'll use tha advice
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