^ RS Topical League, Its Not Something I Put A Lot Into, Its Something I had Like, 3 Days To Write To Their Topic, I Know Its Not My Best, But Its Good For What It was.

And The Movies Called "Cast-Away"

: )

Shiznit's Thoughts:

VOCABULARY/WORDPLAY:

>pretty impressive. The whole "terminology' was awesome. You've chosen in depth words that mostly revealed the actual aspect of the whole piece.
>metas thrown out... a couple of deep descriptive words here and there. props for that

FLOW
>it accompanied me smoothly as i read along the lines. Starting from the beginning until the end the stuffed much enhanced rhyme scheme was good. It fitted the whole verse all throught out. nice job!

CONTENT
>now thats what u can call an "imagery masterpiece". Its like its all there. The massive cryptic descriptive in tact of this piece echoed upon some kind of images inside my head...its quite brilliant!

"Try Picturing A Field Of Blood, Scattered w/ Shrapnel Shaves
Bodies twisted out of shape and with no help of being saved."

^^see what i mean.. These words explained everything. That it was well thought out and when u read it..its as if ur actually there and seeing all those images and on my opinion at some level of grossness. hehe..

>The emotions was all felt throughtout the piece. This made me think of the book i read.."Lord of the Flies"...its just about a bunch of kids got stuck in an island caused of a plane crash. It was very interesting...and as i read it...i thought of saving private ryan..just cause of the images on my mind ya know...

OVERALL..

>brilliant piece...the ending was swell..its good. It was worth reading. nice job!

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"cast away " that's the one.. lol...

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dis piece was illness, u used all the right words, words that paint a picture in ya head n suck ya into the verse, shit like this is hard to lay down, their is like 1 word between ok and brilliant u didnt use that word thus created a dope piece, i dont think this is a worse piece then ya useal just differant then ur other shit, u pulled it off.

CAMARAC!?!?!?!?


You biting again!?!?!


http://www.rhymenreason.net/forum/s...hlight=survivor

^ You dumb fuck, thats mine and phrantiks joint alias at RnR, lmao!

illerthanyall: you knew i was Mr Nobody @ RnR, right?
Pullin The Pen: yes
iller than yall: good
iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...15&pagenumber=2
iller than yall: can you go confirm i wrote that?
iller than yall: their sure i bit it
Pullin The Pen: as9t'ayp3w4irag
iller than yall: lol
Pullin The Pen: copy my text cuz my fuckin' explorer is froze because ive been being sent links for the past 25 minutes and i keep clicking on them
iller than yall: ok
Pullin The Pen: Mr. Nobody Is Camarac. This Piece Isn't Bitten. This Is Salvation. Trust Me. You Little Chuckle Fucks. I'll Gut Your Mother And Wear Her Skin As A Mask. HE DIDNT FUCKIN BITE THIS MORONS.
iller than yall: lmao
iller than yall: cheers sal

And to prove it to you moron that you are, here's the original from, the actual topical league i wrote it for:

http://www.rapspits.com/forums/show...=&threadid=1357

Now what? Moron. .

If it's your joint alias, you wouldn't mind telling me what name it was before that......

And anyway, Camarac, you're a known biter.

Before Mr. Nobody?

Fundamentals, Linguistics, Insert Ill Name Here, MC Trigga

^ Thats who gave me and Phrantik the name.
And FYI, that kid Camarac took my name, it wasnt me.

Believe me now that i wrote that?

Yo, I made a mistake this time..



..But you have been known to bite, and you have been caught on many occasions.

^ I told you i wrote this. .


And by the way, that other kid isnt me, he just took my name - seriously.

Good try though, Ninjetik ; )

who is this fellow? and what does he speak of?
I am confused.
this piece reminded me of that soccer team that got trapped in the mountains and had to eat their goalie....yup, netkeeper anus!
good work cam, really captured the disgustosity of it all.
thats werd, nucca!

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