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08-20-03, 01:20 AM
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Looks up crying
IP: F1E2 CACD
Sitting by the dark computer
Login, user, check pm’s… “loser” Am I getting better?… “never’ This endeavor will never get better Rap’s about fire, your just getting wetter Fuck you all I do this cause Im loven it "Dig deep for skills" nigga I'm shoveling I need positive feedback to get up "waste of time… shut the fuck up" All I ask is for someone to point out what I did wrong The bar was 2 long, play with words more I know it doesn’t rhyme, fuck its not fair I'm trying to get better, but it looks like you don’t care |
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08-20-03, 01:29 AM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
You could start with your rhyme scheme...If you tried to spit this in audio the mic would multipy by two, transform into a crucifix and Nail you like jesus..I sense a bit of self-pitty from this..And a bit of "I need attention"..But i suppose everyone does..
If you have AIM or MSN i'll help you tho..Just drop the name... |
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08-20-03, 01:34 AM
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IP: 9588 E886
i will battle any one of u
holla back |
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08-20-03, 01:36 AM
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IP: F1E2 CACD
luda thanx for the feedback... back to topic
Likewise: thanx for the 2 cents... im NEW to this so im trying to find myself in every aspect of rap. I will agree this was kinda self pity/i need attention. Im happy you got that cause that means i was able to convey the message somewhat... thanx again IM me: amatcha00 (didnt want to add another post) what did u mean about the mic nailing me like jesus. Im guessing that means something bad but can you elaborate Last edited by Am At Cha : 08-20-03 at 02:01 AM. |
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