This is kinda topical...so Rate the topic side of it aswell please..!!

Time to pick up a photo,a picture speaks a thousand words//
a heard of letters beaming thru,theyre standin out like gangs of nerds//
churnin stomaches causin pain,becus this image has deeper means//
a spoken token of inner hoping,got emotions richer than ANY cream//
as i look center,straight and sorrowfull,i see the expression of someone sad//
like if theyre life would end that moment,that lil person would be so glad//
im looking back,cant reckal the face,but little one just looks deppressed//
to think such young a soul like that looks sad,is hard for me to ingest//
im standing starrin at the photo,looks old and dusty,black and wite//
a school of children lined in order,not one or two look out of sight//
some kids look bright,some kids look stupid,but this one looks so very familiar//
all fourteen of fifteen children, have smiles that finish with scintilla//
the ripped up rags that this boy wears has such a moving affect on him//
would he have stollen newer clothes to wear to school without opting?? //
choosing a day to look a bit happier,but happynes today aint happening//
thoughts of this boy endin life,with rope,and this boy balanced,dangling//
if this child ever looks with smiles,or any photo with a grin//
i know that life for this young soul wudnt have ended with life so grim//
so i turn my head,im thinkin harder, who the fuck could this young kid be?? //
my heart stops beating for a moment, and remember sadly,that kid was ME....!!



If theres any words u dont now...ask bout them..!!

I know a phew of u wont get this 1..!!
Scintilla = Spark.....get it...Smiling with a spark..!!?

anyway...any oppinion and compliment will be returned with a compliment on one of ur verses...1!! peace

Topic was hard to catch right up until the end, that put a nice twist on it, this flowed pretty good as i read it, internals were a little basic because i always use internal-multi's nowadays, anyways - flow was decent, i liked the concept, all in all not a bad drop my man.

Eace-Pay!

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thanx bro..!!!!

pretty simple...
it flowed ok I guess...
rhyme scheme was aight...
But yo, I was really feeling the structure of it, that whole looking back a the photo thing... feeling that man...
This could've been better no doubt, but it was aight...

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^^^^lol....thanx man.....anymore..!?!?!

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that was a good drop..flow was hard to catc i thought but at the end was dope you ripped it god there i thought good all the way through but the end u came along great with a killer finish good piece..1

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Yeah, good drop here and the end made the piece. Good on filppin that shit around. I liked the concept and the flow could have been a little better, but keep droppin shit like this. I'll keep an eye out.

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prity good, pritty good, like they said ur flow was kinda hard to catch but it was good