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09-18-03, 11:52 AM
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Just call me your Savior
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a split personallity, GOOD VS. BAD as NUETRAL watches....and chooses one...
IP: F718 7AAD
i look left...
right... forward... and backward... up... down... all around... where am i?... a see... no, hear... no, smell... no, taste... no, feel... no.......i sense... another being near... yet so far... where is the space... that contains me?... i have not found my escape... my release... where is it?... so i can find that other person?... inside myself?...
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09-18-03, 02:48 PM
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IP: 4162 E744
its different. a spacial poem. I can understand it, but i dont really feel it. it probably was written to be simple but yet deep. I dont really feel the substance of the poem.
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09-18-03, 03:44 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 640C 3FBD
I didn't understand it. The title threw me off cause when I was reading it I didn't notice the different personalities and I didn't notice where neutral was watching and choosing. Though it seemed to be the wrong info, I got more out of the title than the writing itself. Didn't like this one too much but oh well, you can't keep everyone happy. Keep posting.
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09-18-03, 11:25 PM
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IP: 9B33 081B
are you talking about your concience or are you a schizo?.....lol....i got your point the struggle to be yourself or something like that.....i like this it had a simple yet deep meaning forces the reader to look beneath the words....great drop i like your style..
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