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Old 09-23-03, 08:03 PM   #1
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The name Jahaira

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Ok when I did this Poem My friend Jahaira asked of me really not to think. She wanted
Me to script off the top of my head, the ideas I get when I mention her name...So this Poem isn't complex but to me it is very good...Please give input critque.

When The name Jahaira is said....

Sweet things come to my head-Your smile the way me and you clown-How we go into deep conversation, left wanting more.When the name Jahaira is said-the first image that comes to my head, is your eyes. The way you look at me makes me shy-When I look at ya number in my cell- Laughter and sweetness rings bells.One of the first things that comes to mind. When thinking of you I say damn shes fine. From what I see your intellegence can challenge Mines. I truly think of fun things we can do in due time. Strong and competitve a women who is beyond the average head. Not shallow not even fake. A lady staying true to herself realizing the definition of Race!
Someone when I look at I can sense depthness. Someone who seems to strive to be a perfectionist. A women who knows what she wants. Funny how you said Ur trying to achieve the altimate Nutt!! A bug out, women with respect. A person who is very careful who she selects. A women with great taste. To behonest you remind me of someone that is apart of me. That's why I can relate (Hint). When your name first comes to mind-
To be real I say to myself, You are the mystery that I know longer need to Find!
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Old 09-23-03, 09:48 PM   #2
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lol iunno but sounds like more then a friend.....this piece came off wit a um....hot feeling....sort of maybe a respective idolizing....like....keeping respect for her in describing her beauty

the imagry u throw down is sickness man it really is nice....good job keep writin
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Old 09-23-03, 10:48 PM   #3
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damn... we seriously need to collab..like now
upping the IJL

oh yea.. this was ill, images had me like WOW
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Old 09-25-03, 07:53 PM   #4
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Ty guys...

"the imagry u throw down is sickness man it really is nice"
Shizzle... Ty I do try...

More input please..

laterz..
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Old 12-13-03, 03:50 PM   #5
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i think i know her... Jahaira from flatbush? be singing and stuff? holla at me let me know
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Old 12-13-03, 05:00 PM   #6
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^Lol i felt like the imagery in this was crystal clear and i can relate to the feeling lol sounds like either u were tryna butter her up or u only "say shes just a friend", dont get "the vapors" man lol 1luv.
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Old 12-13-03, 08:11 PM   #7
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Lol ty for input....Nah she isn't from flatbush....

Laters...
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Old 12-14-03, 04:40 PM   #8
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You kept on using 'women' instead of 'woman'. It might have some personal relevance, but i didn't see it. Maybe it's cos i aint looking hard enough. Merely the surface.

Anyway, i like it. Poured out with feelings (both directly and indirectly). It was simple, but in a very good way. I held strong all the way through.

...resp...
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Old 12-16-03, 12:42 PM   #9
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nice
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