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11-12-03, 10:03 PM
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emotionally bruised
IP: 2970 7FD1
Crying in my room
Not sure what to do I am so sick of crying over boys like you Why do I always feel rejected? Why do I always feel like it’s me? Just as I started to love you, and care for you tenderly. That’s when shit hit da fan You got up and vacated, Man u fucking ran. I am at the end of my wits With the shit I have done I see myself falling for you And I don’t know what to do, I am so confused Man if you like me why is it so hard for you to show it too. Because my caring for you is real. I would never lie to you Cheat on you, or leave you like those other did to you. Man I don’t understand why you leave me so confused If you really like me then stop leavening me emotionally bruised. ~Let me know what you guys think and if you have any Suggestions ~ |
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11-12-03, 10:14 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
Good job. Scheme was a lil off in parts. Kind of like u rhymed then u didnt. But it was ok. Structure was good. A lot of emotion runnin through this. Everything was felt, and believe me, i can relate. Overall good job. Much respect. Keep droppin.
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11-12-03, 10:28 PM
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IP: 2970 7FD1
thank for u advice i take it to heart
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11-13-03, 09:14 AM
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IP: A9AA 2164
keep em comming guys
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11-13-03, 09:25 AM
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IP: F718 7AAD
This was good. Your emotions were felt. Most guys have a problem and don't want to show stuff. There to worried about there social status to get attached and all this other crap. Guys have problems coping with themselfs and telling there true feelings. I see it at school but on here It different. Keep your head high and don't blame yourself or get depressed. Thanks for the great read. Spect JT
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