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11-26-03, 02:17 AM
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PRetty chunky homie. I like the focus, i think i could hear this on a mello track. keep reckin diversity is a great tool
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11-26-03, 02:12 PM
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11-26-03, 11:21 PM
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Wow this was pretty deep masta, i was really feeling that it touched me in a way i could relate to, You had some Really good lines, your multies were really good also, overall this piece was really good, enjoyed the read
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11-27-03, 04:57 PM
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Hey Thanks For The Feedback Rap Chick...Keep The Feedback Coming In..Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.
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11-28-03, 12:47 AM
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lil sappy, kould be turned into a song from da gaysink or w/e, but i feel ya dawg... id give diss a 7/10
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11-28-03, 05:53 PM
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11-28-03, 06:04 PM
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i like clicking into thread links with catchy title . . you did exactly that . . the drop went exactly with the title of the drop . . that's good! as for your chorus/hook be more creative with that . . you over used the word "baby" . . it sounded like something B2K would write . . so next time stay away from the words like baby . . na'sayin? it appeared that you had a little wordplay in there so that's good . . you had some metaphors as well . . vocabs! you need to at least show you have an intelligent mind . . use vocabs . . but don't overdose on it . . it'll only make your verse(s) just boring . . try adding multies . . it'll make it a sweet read . . na'sayin? but like the vocabs . . don't overdose on these neither . . you had a nice structure which made it an easy read . . this peice was pretty deep . . i liked it . . keep droppin . . keep elevatin . . get at me!
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11-28-03, 06:19 PM
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LMAO@ dilousion some multis? all of it was read over it again
LMAO @ klink haha! try using multis..for one its a love song 2 its all multis just some are off and 3 you need a lesson on somthings aswell please....feel free to hit me up if you need beef or want some ill battle who ever.....Aim : Sick barS Masta tight flow...nice over all best ive seen you need a audio see how it sounds over beat...just work on ya courses a lil more but over all real nice kid 8.8 over all out of 10 best ive seen from you keep it up.....one.1.wun Last edited by Wreck † SpliCiT : 11-28-03 at 06:21 PM. |
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11-29-03, 08:03 PM
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lol...Well Thanks For The Feedback So Far...Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.
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