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Corrupted Visions:Shadows
IP: 6F9E F23B
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...3136#post943136 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...3139#post943139 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...3142#post943142 Corrupted Visions: Shadows................. By Nok - Sacred Scriptures piece …The shadowy plain casts a dark cast of rain upon my brain… …Victim of Loss, simple and plain, Evidentially insane… …Unclear in the darkness of what’s plain to see or not… …All I see is the lifeless shadow of my baby in it’s cot… …Imprints of the dark vision begin to stain my mind… …Lookin for anything to ease the pain, I try to find… …Someone to help me, all I can do is sit and hope… …While I watch my sons life fade away, just like smoke… …Watch his soul begin to rise, how can this shit be?... …God’s takin away my little boy, the mini-me… …Supposed to fill my dreams little ‘en make Daddy proud… …Now to talk to you have to look up at the clouds… …Up in heaven now I guess, lookin down at my mistakes… …I know your still here at time,The shadowy figure at my gates… …Watchin over me…lookin after like I should be doin’ you… …But even now we together,sub-consciously I know this thru n thru… …Shadows play tricks on me…Still believe I can see U at Ur death… …”Day-Dreams” become Nightmares,There’s no signs of breath… …The lifeless Vision stains my eyelids, close my eyes,I go Crazy… …Alll I wanna do is perish…So I can too be with my baby…
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yeah man i liked it , some nice little multis thrown in, flow was good for the most fell off once or twice but hell thats fuck all.....concept wasn't bad....some nice imagery.....all in all decent shit.....Pz
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Drop Of Genius
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IP: 13FC 3083
I liked this a lot.
The flow was really good and I like the structure with the ...fhlsjfi... You were creative on a subject which is real for so many people but to improve it more vocab could have been added aswell as more multies. Overall - 7/10 |
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IP: 19AF 50C1
IT WAS DEF A GR8T DROP ALL FACTORS INCLUDED I CANT WAIT TO SEE MORE
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..Soft Focus..
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IP: 1B3B C284
great drop man you had some good imergery and sence of realness in this piece great wordplay and creativity keep it up pz
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 |
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Word.
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IP: 6FDC 23CB
Yeah i agree this was a real nice drop....made a good read i thought...your structure on this was real nice....i liked the multies in this, they were pretty good...the content in this was real nice as well...overall it was a good drop....keep at it.
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