http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...4218#post984218
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...4224#post984224
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...4233#post984233

Yes How many times do I gotta tell it
That I got my own mind and its compos-mentis
Should treat me like a master not the apprentice
Cos I Don’t need shit but get it relentless
That’s why I invent this to put a stop
To interfering outsiders enveloping my spot
So Go rot in hell don’t tell n lecture me im sick
“Get a job” Fuck off! “Don’t be a bum” Fucking Dick!
Inflict ya voice on someone, anyone but me
Im nearing the end of my tether, building rage to burst free
A volcano ready to erupt, to spill out n burn ya to fuck
I got my own problems so solve and set of bad luck
Don’t need the earache cos I intake n make enough
How many times can you hear the same thing?
Before ya ears start to ring, sending drilling to ya brain
Like a tap dripping it can send ya insane
Repeating.. Repeating.. Again and again
Do I ever question them, NO..None of my business
Cos ya life is ya own and not just for Christmas
What is this?……
Why the interest in me must have medioka lives
No excitement n jealous cos I thrive n don’t try
I don’t live a lie, I don’t pretend or intend to fly
Im down to earth and move at my own pace
Remember we end the human race at different times
So why rush? Ya don’t chose when ya cross the line
It’s predetermined in the future and can’t be declined
So get off my case, I aint listening
For the last time……
I live it how I want to remember when reminiscing
So why be concerned? When its just me that’ll be missing!
….Not YOU….

This was a good verse. Some nice multi's and wordplay, and at the same time, gave a feeling of defiance.

Says a lot here, in so few words. I felt that it COULD be refined, some, in the message that was conveyed, as it DID come across somewhat general, and a lil' blurry at times.
-Just as myself, I prefer a slightly more "clearly defined" picture, when reading another's words, but at the same time, I have the same difficulty in my verses also.

Also, maybe a lil' bit tighter flow -I like when the words fall into place when spoken to a beat, and because of that not quite working out for ME, I marked it somewhat lower than I would have, due to the gripping concept.

Overall, I rate it a 7.5/10

Nice Drop.

Watch for mine.

that was tight i like ya multies and i was feelin ya punches that was a all around dope verse ya can u look at this and drop an honest vote http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=98516

It was a good write. I was feeling the multi's as well. You had pretty good vocab, and put it to good use. I like the topic, its somthing a little diffrent. Also, there were some really good lines in there. The flow stayed on point as well. Good drop hommie...
---> Could you return the favor and peep " Deacon Diss " in my sig and tell me what you think of it.

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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Yeah this was a pretty good piece here....your structure was pretty good in this like it usually is.....vocab by you is always good i think lol...the flow in this was pretty nice i thought, it stayed on through out the whole verse...overall a nice drop....keep at it.

yeah thnx ppl....i was trying to go with some thing a little different..so....pZ.....

uppin ppl.................some feedback over here.thnx.......pZ

dope: structure,flow...
i liked this piece alot - im not really critiquing it to the 'fullest'
but im hitting u a up wit a positive reply, so - incase u wanted one sorry..
keep spittin

that was pritty tight

keep it up

thnx for the breakdown..hound...lol...i can really build on that.........but thnx ppl....pZ......

overall not bad, I wasnt really able to catch the flow,l but its hard on text. The rhymes where pretty simple tho. Well whatever, Id like to hear that on audio though man

peace

overall it was pretty good... ok flow and nice multis and metas...vocab was good and i was feeling the drop. maybe alittle bit more detail

and i agree with -RockWilda- , i would also like to hear it on audio

*waits for her to do it on audio just cuz i thought so* =) (=

thnx its all appreciated..........