REPLIED TO: B.I. DETAINED, ROBO, RULE

THE WORD REMIX IN THE TITLE,
IS THE NAME OF THE PERSON WHOS POINT OF VIEW IM GOING FROM INTHIS PIECE.

(verses that have a * next to them are like a narrarators verses.
the ones with a + are remixs verses)

*A once towering city lies in ruins
Among the aftermath only one massive symbol of influence
A giant C...on the side of the only remaining building
It filled the mysterious man with a sick feeling...
The lone figure stands
On plains of wastlands and dunes of sand
With a black device in his right hand
Delapidated from battle, but still barely funtcional
He stares at it with a look of pain - the long forbidden tool
He onced used with much pride battle wise
Under unoppressed skies free to freesltye live
But never to be again, becuase a tyrant
By the name of C would intervine and disrupt the hip-hop scene
You see, Mics had long been outlawed from common publics
In hopes to quel a rabid youth, the year was 2006
C's tyranny begins against masses that would seek revenge
To stop a madman, among those, a young reMix

+DAMN! This cat actually went through with it, I can't believe...
To think, he actually used to break bread with me!
Used to tell me his dreams, of a new world monarchy
All part of a real scheme that I didn't see, apparently
I thought it was simply jest, but that look in his eyes...rage
Back when SRK was a safe haven for lyricists who had a pen but no page
What the hell happened!? It's US this bastard betrayed!
Can't let this remain, I can't let it end this way
This motherfucker will fall, or Mix isn't my name!
Now where's H-9?....

*See, he would need help, the situation was that tragic
Once an enemy, now a possible hope, the merc Havoc
Known undergournd only as H-9
The only emcee Mix knew had the skills and the lyrical drive
Equipped with similar minds as sharp as blades
A match made once or twice against the best of the day
Like the legendary tag team vs. Kaze
Records of which,
Would soon be destroyed around the time C's reign begins
It's true
See, Havoc had plans for 2022
To challenge the "third letter devil," and that's he would do
But first an underground alliance must be formed
Mix and H-9 would start the organization and prep it for war
This would mark the first attempts rekindle the order of old
Whether it would succeed is a whole other tale be told...

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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW

Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/
So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S.

THIS PIECE IS SET IN THE PAST.

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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW

Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/
So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S.

this was pretty good, i felt your structure was a little off which made your flow hard to follow but it had some good wordplay and a lot of good ideas, a good read with some good imagery keep it up mayn pz

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Yeah your structure was a little off,which made it hard to read at some points(I Got thru it though).Flow was on point,good concept.Keep dropping
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This was a pretty good drop. The structure was the main problem in this piece. I feel you could have used more vocab in this piece as well. You did have a couple good lines in there, and the topic was pretty good as well. Keep Elevatin Hommie...

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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thx for the feed back my niggas.
i'll prolly have part 3 out today.
peace.

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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW

Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/
So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S.