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Dreamz n Questions

b4 i go 2 bed, gotta say stuff to the above//
first off, wanna say thanx to god for showin me love//
i wanna thank him, for takin care of family that's passed//
for instance, my little sister, never made it, didnt last//
only 45 minutes young, then her internals collapsed//
its really hard, watchin your poor parents grasp//
eachother, id like to pray for my motherand my brother//
rememberin the times we laughed together, also b4 i slumber//
wanna pray for my father, works hard for his money//
comes home every night, makes our lives sunny//
I wanna pray for my my grandparents, they let mesee the sights//
With all they talents,they always gave me delights//
Finally, gotta pray for my frendz, they never leave my side//
Now imma sleep 2 tha soundz of the siren’s cry//

So many questions, but nows I gots to sleep//
Tryin to find out the meanin y life so deep//
y so many people dien, cuz the hill of life 2 steep//
these questions come n go in my dreamz of sleep//

y so many people dien, starvin, and homeless//
while others all decked out, but others chromeless//
and all my foes are domeless, but god bless the dead//
\especially those in 9/11, just picture the dread//
those people came across, but to anybody whos lost//
somebody, it aint easy, it’s the hardest thing it cause//
a lot tears, like the holocaust, so many innocent died//
just cuz they jewish the Nazis made em fry//
our world is hopeless, we just cant seem to focus//
on the more important things like the hocus-pocus//
our government puts in our brains, to hide us//
from the things that remind us but they still disquise us//
but now all that happens, is goin down the drain//
n wuts up with the media, why the hell the world insane//

So many questions, but nows I gots to sleep//
Tryin to find out the meanin y life so deep//
y so many people dien, cuz the hill of life 2 steep//
these questions come n go in my dreamz of sleep//
So many questions, but nows I gots to sleep//
Tryin to find out the meanin y life so deep//
y so many people dien, cuz the hill of life 2 steep//
these questions come n go in my dreamz of sleep//


I don’t understand, why the people of the world suffer//
Its sad wathcin fathers die to give their famlies supper//
when a lady gets deported, while she preparing a new crib//
And has two kids, damn give these kids a chance to live//
But no they send em back to crappy conditions//
Now this poor family gunna hafta make a livin outta fishin//
And all the innocent people who go to prison//
Its horrible watchin these peoples families get divisions//
And now Africa runnin outta money to stop aids//
all those other people inexpert cuz they cant get good grades//
hopefully sometime this ignorant world will change//
I know everyone on the planet earth wishin 4 these days//

So many questions, but nows I gots to sleep//
Tryin to find out the meanin y life so deep//
so many people cuz the hill of life 2 steep//
these questions come n go in my dreamz of sleep//


im thinkin about puttin this in audio, what yall think

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