Yes I'm a newbie, but after this you'll really think I'm not.
When I drop my verse, you feel like you just been shot.
weak opener.....way too basic
My verbs and adverbs hit you with everything I got
while your nouns stay limp in your hands like your cock.
blah...
Yes KLO's the name, and I'm about to explain
why battling me is the worst kind of pain.
your rhyme scheme is plain....no punches or personals
You're just a bitch, yeah, don't even continue;
you'll need a support group after the raping I'ma give you.
a little better
Don't even drop your shit, you might as well eat it;
the nutrional value is high, you probably need it
and the stains on your teeth are less humiliating than being defeated.
weak closer...overall wasn't feelin this verse


Klo don't try to escape, I kill kids with lines in a jolt..
I put out the light in ya head, u have no time to re volt..
nice opener...pretty creative
to get the win with good character, he's methodly hoping...
two wrongs dont make a right, so you need ethical motive..
not bad....too much filler though
I aint readin ur verse, cuz u prolly aint rhymin, fuck..
this little bitch tried checkin in after his time was up..
okay.....it was pretty funny
my lines are based in truth, givin you some pounding..
ur lines are awestricken, cuz they're all dumb founded
this was pretty good
dont give me this newbie shit, im already past it
im just wonderin why yall like gettin ya ass whipped ?
not bad closer....
overall i've seen feeble come harder but he still took this battle in every aspect, KLO you just need to look at some example verses and figure out what your doing wrong...

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